rate my poem?

Question

Won't be the last time...

Feeling a bit run down today
But I dont mind because lifes going ok
Supose its just the emptyness of not knowing who to be
Trying to fit in and at the same time wanting to be me.

Ive got a good idea though
I'll just lay in bed again
And let the days troubles float away
While I can dream and drink endless cups of tea with custard creams.

At about half past five I'll probably get up
And watch the evening news
And feel guilty for thinking I had problems of my own
As I remember moaning I had too much food to eat
and complaining about having no money
cause I spent it on a pair of jeans I know I'll never wear.

I shall smoke my daily 'last ever cigarette'
Drag myself to bed
I'll think to myself 'man what a day I've had!'
And fall asleep in the knowledge
that this won't be the last time I spend all day in my pajamas.

Answer 1

i got stuck with the 2nd stanza as
it felt like a commercial for tea with custard creams

also:
this won't be the last time i'm all day in pajamas -- i think would work better on beats

give the work an 8 of 10
hope you'll share more

i like!

Answer 2

7 of 10

Answer 3

Wow, I liked it...I hate reading poems =P. This is the kind of poem I like, though, because it's not written in some kind of code that you have to decipher (Emily Dickinson, bah). I also like the fact that it rhymes...hm, only in the first stanza? It reads well the rest of the way through, though.
Very nice! If 1=Emily Dickinson and 10=really good, I'd give it a 9-10 =).
(That's just my opinion; a lot of people like her, meh =P)

Answer 4

I liked it. I think a lot of people can relate to it.

Answer 5

8
it's relate-able
it makes sense
it rymes
I didn't struggle to read it
it was good