What do u think of this poem??

Question

I wrote this poem it came to me:
Dear Reader,

I am writing this letter to say goodbye.
I can’t stand this wretched life anymore I’m living a lie.
Pretending to be happy, pretending to live.
I have nothing to offer, nothing to give.
So I figure why not end my life.
It’s not like my death will cause you any struggle or strife.
In case your wondering if I ever cared for you.
I did more than you’ll ever know, but you didn’t thank me for the things I do.
So I stopped trying to impress.
In this letter I tried to express.
That I was more than a ghost, I was real.
Even though you never noticed me it’s no big deal.
They say a person is never known till their dead.
I guess I’ll find out when you find my lifeless body in bed.
Goodbye for I will miss this dreaded strife.
But it’s time for me to move on to my after life!

Forever yours,
Shadow
(this is not a real letter just a poem)

Answer 1

omg!!!! i love it its like totally awsome!!

Answer 2

Well it has a good flow to it. It's a little morbid, but so are most of mine. Overall I like it. Have you ever checked out writing.com? The people there would be able to help you out a lot.

Answer 3

Hello

My Name it´s Yaznaya
I´m From Mexico City

And I thing that poem it´s very cool

Kisses a lot..
Bye

Answer 4

Good poem...glad to hear it has no basis in your life !

Would, with a little tweaking, be a great song for Evanescence or someone of that genre.

Answer 5

It's hilarious! The part I like the best is when you said "It came to me", Oh!! (wiping the tear from my eye) that was good thank you.

Answer 6

that poem is scary. It makes me feel sad. Do you need a hug? It really sounds like a suicide note.

Answer 7

Um...pretty morbid is what I think.

Answer 8

its a bit dreary, I like it.