Life's Like That
Cold and grey,
your hair blown astray.
Flustered lost,a windswept sunhat.
It may be confusing, but life's like that.
Nervous with jitters,
heart's butterflies flitter.
perhaps your shy, oh what a drat.
Left in the shadows, life's like that.
Crazy with worry, feeling insane,
riding around, on an non-stopping train.
Not sure of where you're going,or even where you're at,
spun like a spinner, life's like that.
Not feeling well, full of regret.
your feelings are obvious, by your brow full of sweat,
full of remorse, you feel small as a gnat.
It's merely human nature, because life's like that.
Now you're happy and elated,
aren't you glad that you waited?
A tire lacking air, my poem's gone flat.
So here's the happy ending,
because life's sometimes like that.
2007-03-22 09:01:39 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
needs work.....the ending isn't good.
peace
2007-03-22 09:10:31 · answer #1 · answered by Shadow Lark 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hi, Cool poem, and it rhymes!!!!!. There may be a place for non rhyming poems but it sure ain't in any of my poetry books. You have a theme, a reason and a conclusive ending. It's as good as my poems and that is high praise indeed. Joking apart, I enjoyed reading it. What more can a poet want?
Cheers, and keep on writing.
2007-03-22 16:17:01 · answer #2 · answered by graham b 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love the title and many of the lines. I'm not a "rhyme each line" kind of person...but I really like the ending.
2007-03-22 16:11:13 · answer #3 · answered by Bleachlady.com 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is really good.. you have a knack for this! I really do like it alot would love to read more..i am a writer myself so seeing other peoples work is wonderful!! :) <3
2007-03-22 16:06:42 · answer #4 · answered by jessann 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty cool, I don't rhyme my poetry, but I think it's great
2007-03-22 16:06:04 · answer #5 · answered by faith13power 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok
2007-03-22 16:11:39 · answer #6 · answered by r1114@sbcglobal.net 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋