I was in a horrible break up and it was serious. I'm not gonna go in details cuz I'd run out of room and it don't matter. I wrote this poem while I was trying to coap with the pain after we got back together. We are together now but in the beginning it was still hard. Will you please read & rate 1-10 and tell me what you think plz---------------------------?
All these feelings I try to hide
but all I do is strip my pride.
All those nights you slept, I cried
just because you never tried.
I wanted you to take my side,
but all you did was tell me lies.
I've cried so hard my eyes are fried.
Why can't my thoughts be justified?
I want my eyes wiped and dried.
My heart can only stretch so wide.
My feelings are tied,
my thoughts caulide and now
my hearts been denied.
It's like my lifes been crusified.
You know that night we took that ride?
I really wish I would have died.
I know it's harsh but I was really hurt and I write to help me deal with things.
2007-03-22 07:44:09 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
i'm hurt ;(
u got 9
2007-03-22 08:17:56 · answer #1 · answered by xrudylimx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Rating is 9
2007-03-22 14:51:46 · answer #2 · answered by beaner 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, until the end. (edit: I re-read about getting back together)
I rate a 6, add some line breaks and change the final two lines and it's at least a 7.
2007-03-22 14:50:26 · answer #3 · answered by washins 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your poem is heartfelt and i hope you're on the road to recovery. love conquers all ! i rate it a 6
2007-03-22 14:51:56 · answer #4 · answered by Cloudy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's really good i like it 8
2007-03-22 14:50:47 · answer #5 · answered by Kim C 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's to one dimensional.
2007-03-22 14:52:23 · answer #6 · answered by triple o.g. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋