I'm doing an internship at an apartment complex and I was asked to make a letter to send to our competitors to ask them to refer people to us that they don't have room for. Unfortunately, it's very hard to get across the message that we don't want to steal their customers. I have a very very very rough draft now, that I hope you can help me revise. I know it sucks, so you don't have to tell me that if you can manage not to. :-)
Here it is:
Send us your rejects and get $50!
If you have any people come in looking for apartments, but can’t fit them, send them to us! We have all types of apartments available.
Please don’t misunderstand, we aren’t trying to steal your customers, we think that we can help you. If you can’t fit someone, rather them send them out the door, tell them to come see us!
2007-03-22 07:39:36 · 3 answers · asked by Famous Amos {not the cookies} 5 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
We don’t just want to fill our apartments, we feel that this can help you keep a positive image by still helping the people you can’t lease apartments to. AND we will give a $50 gift card for every referred lessee. Just make sure they tell us you referred them so we can send you your gift card!
If you have any questions, please feel free to give me a call!
Thank you!
2007-03-22 07:39:47 · update #1
Do you have overspill? More applicants than spaces?
We can help. AND we pay $50 for each referral.
All types of apartment available.
2007-03-22 07:44:16 · answer #1 · answered by catfish 4 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Is business booming? Are your apartments full? Do you find yourself turning away qualified renters because of lack of space?
Let us help you! For every lease signed through a direct referral from you, (competitor's apartment complex name here), we will send you $50.
You CAN receive something for nothing. Just be sure to tell your overflow renters to mention they heard about us through (competitor's apartment complex name here), and you will receive $50 for each lease signed.
Give it a try! You've got nothing to lose, and $50 per signed referral to gain!!
2007-03-22 08:11:25 · answer #2 · answered by karat4top 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think it sounds good the way that it is. You may want to add that you will send them your 'rejects' as well.
2007-03-22 07:43:19 · answer #3 · answered by Jo 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋