The day's just beginning
You see the girl you love
You don't know what to do or say
You're friends, you talk to eachother everyday
On the phone, computer, etc
You're walking with her
Talking, laughing, having the time of your life
The sun hits ya, you smile at her she smiles at you
It's time to say goodbye
You hug and walk off
You're walking, past places where we played as kids
Later you talk to eachother
Time's ending
You say you'll see eachother tomorrow
You know what
You're in goddamn love
Is there anything else better in the world
2007-03-22 02:44:13 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
sweeeeeeeet
2007-03-22 03:00:41 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
My honest opinion is that it sucks - In a way that I have never seen anything suck before. I sincerely hope you are gainfully employed as anything other than a poet. At least I appreciate the fact that you actually admitted to writing it yourself.
2007-03-22 09:50:22 · answer #2 · answered by Shagged 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love Sucks.
2007-03-22 09:47:44 · answer #3 · answered by Sunrise 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I am not sure how to answer this, in love ??? I am glad for you, but ??? LOL and this poem needs some work on it, it is hard to read a little, but good I guess, keep writing
2007-03-22 09:50:09 · answer #4 · answered by Friend 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would have given it a 10 if you would have left God out of itâ¥
2007-03-22 09:56:25 · answer #5 · answered by *queenfairy1*Antioch California 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good for you to help writting in future think of these ....subject....purpose....emotion.....craftsmanship....summary if that helps keep up the work
2007-03-22 09:49:13 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good, you should write more often
2007-03-22 09:47:31 · answer #7 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋