A heart felt poem 3?

Question

please can you give constructive comments on my poem, also could you please let me know if you can get the feeling i am trying to put across and if not why, many thanx for spending your time reading this poem


A poem I wrote, an opinion I ask
Tell me what you think? Do not mask
All the comments, if they be good or bad
Whether they make me happy or sad

I read the comments, looking for a clue
And saw a question, what age are you
Your words do touch me, they make me melt
They made me feel how you would have feel
At last I smile someone that understands

All the work a heart felt poem demands
An email I send to answer your question
And this is when you happen to mention
That you have the need to write things down
The things make you happy or frown

We change our poems over the following week
For encouragement and comments we both do seek
It’s great that I have found a friend, a fellow poet
We are farmers of words, we sow what we reap
And share with each other memories to keep

Answer 1

Hi there Steve S, Your poem comes across to me as an appreciation of finding a fellow poet or writer who is on the same wavelength as you, and who has also become a cherished friend. Your poem, at the moment, is a little basic.....but it has great potential. I think that it is missing some descriptive vocabulary. However, I did love the last verse. Keep practising, your enthusiasm and potential is definately there.

Answer 2

Again well written - A songwriter friend of mine once told me - Great work though you need to tighten it up some - Bring it together - Don't drag it out - Now those are the word's he said to me - And I took it as a loving truthful response -

I love how your Rhyming your word's
I do the same

You write them and I'll read them he said to me and that was a great compliment
And I say the same words to you

Answer 3

Sorry but I couldn't get past the 6th line.

Its not exactly Romeo and Juliet really - I think the subject matter needs to change about something other than our rating

You've obviously spent some time on this so keep you pecker up.

Answer 4

I like this one too. I think it's about finding another poet to be friends with. It has a nice flow and rhythm like the last one. And shows that you have a lot of potential.

Answer 5

oh it's pretty.