Blue
You’re not in the room and it’s not fair.
I’m feeling so lonely being with me.
I wish you were here and not there
To see how sorrowful I could be.
I love it when I get your touch,
I hate it when you’re not here.
I do love to kiss you so much,
And to hold you by me, so near.
This is the moment I need you most,
But you’re not here and I feel blue.
So I daydream us on a coast,
Walking close with our love so true.
I do know this dream will soon fade,
I will be left in this longest night;
To escape this night I want your aid,
I want u to come and keep me tight.
The dream is gone, and I’m left alone,
But my heart is filled with love and mirth,
For you’ll come just like the day you shone
In the morning of the day of the sun’s birth.
2007-03-21 21:53:45 · 8 answers · asked by S G 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
very ........... BLUE
2007-03-21 21:55:40 · answer #1 · answered by asphyxia 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
2/5
2007-03-21 21:56:01 · answer #2 · answered by Jaci 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree with the others. The last 4 lines are the best and actually is a good summary of the whole poem.
2007-03-22 04:15:37 · answer #3 · answered by marilyn e 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it very much, and I agree the last 4 lines are magnificent!
2007-03-21 22:06:09 · answer #4 · answered by S L H 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like the end. Just those last for lines.
2007-03-21 22:04:03 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
just another case of unrequited love.
it has a deep blue vibe indeed. the lover is never there when u need her/him the most.
just go 4 it. she will b right in ur arms by sun-up. (scream!)
2007-03-22 06:11:25 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It' s good but poems don't have to rhyme .. all the time because they start to get hard to read but if that's the feel that you want then it's good.
2007-03-21 22:12:56 · answer #7 · answered by sexxisha 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
5/10
seems forced in the 3rd and 5th stanzas if the feelings are true........ its good that you shared though
2007-03-21 22:06:21 · answer #8 · answered by smartass_yankee_tom 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋