Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch; blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table and the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes.
2007-03-21 15:22:45 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Put a period after 'table'. Leave out the 1st 'and' & use a capital T in 'the'.
2007-03-21 17:51:03 · answer #1 · answered by №1 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My take:
"Dr. Frankenstein flung (on) a power switch (no semi colon) and blue streamers of static electricity crackled (all) about the table and [you could make this two sentences by breaking here and taking out 'and' or keep it as a longer sentence if it fits into the paragraph well] the creature gave a grunt, (opening) it's smoldering eyes." [it is correct to say 'and opened' but since you said 'and' just a few words ago it feels odd to say it again, I think]
2007-03-21 22:40:34 · answer #2 · answered by Blirp 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dr. Frankenstein turned on the power switch. Blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table. Suddenly, the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes.
2007-03-21 22:36:02 · answer #3 · answered by sherijgriggs 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch and blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table; the creature gave a grunt and opened its smoldering eyes.
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Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch and blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table. The creature gave a grunt and opened its smoldering eyes.
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Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch, causing blue streamers of static electricity to crackle about the table, and then the creature gave a grunt and opened its smoldering eyes.
2007-03-21 22:28:51 · answer #4 · answered by Ashboo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table ,the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes when Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch;
2007-03-21 22:29:53 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 3⤋
Dr. Frankenstein flicked (flung would mean he threw it) a power switch. (The compound-complex sentence is too much) Blue streams (streamers are not what you're looking for, they're decorations) of static electricity crackled about the table. The creature gave a grunt and opened his smoldering eyes. (too many compound sentences)
2007-03-21 22:28:15 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Dr Frankenstien flung the switch; blue streams of static electricity crackled through the table. The creature opened his smoldering eyes and grunted to life.
2007-03-21 22:27:52 · answer #7 · answered by Kenster102.5 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋