Something I wrote a few weeks ago:
The realm of darkness
In which I dwell
This place that light and love forgot.
Come seek me out
And join me here
This land where nothing matters.
Descend with me
Down to the depths;
Depravity, pain and filth.
They left me here
In this place not sought
And I can't claw my way back
To the land of the living
The world above
Where happiness still exists.
Instead, abandoned
In this place to rot;
No more than I deserve.
2007-03-21 12:50:39 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Kinda chilling, True Blue....very dark. I like that you didn't add any excessive imagery. By leaving it stark, you created the "realm of darkness" quite nicely. It flows pretty well, and I love it that there isn't any forced rhyming, or long wordy lines.
All in all? Nice, very nice.
2007-03-21 12:57:04 · answer #1 · answered by aidan402 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As I read your work it seems so surreal.I felt that way too the past two years.Luckily,with Gods help and my loved ones I was able to "claw my way back" up to "the world above, where happiness still exist". Truly you are blue as your name and poem evokes.My humble suggestion is for you to connect to more people,to go out of your shell,commune with
nature and come alive! Life is still worth living!Bless you.
2007-03-21 13:55:58 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honey, I feel like you wrote that just for me. I think that it is beautiful. You are EXTREMELY talented and definitely need to have that piece published. Feel free to contact me. My e-mail is unknownsoldier1st@yahoo.com. Thank you. I am in the process of trying to print this right now.
2007-03-21 13:43:44 · answer #3 · answered by unknownsoldier1st 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Just think that it was a Nightmare and that too of a few moments!!!!
2007-03-29 11:50:14 · answer #4 · answered by cabridog 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow....I really like how dark it is...I can tell exactly how you were feeling when you wrote it.
2007-03-21 19:52:01 · answer #5 · answered by Nicolers 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like.
2007-03-27 16:02:10 · answer #6 · answered by "Chreece" 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i liked it.it is a really good poem
2007-03-28 13:38:19 · answer #7 · answered by lilia i 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG!!!! that is really impressive. I would hold on to that one if I were you.
2007-03-29 05:01:45 · answer #8 · answered by luvdov 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's s'h'i't, sorry. Really. It is.
2007-03-25 19:45:04 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋