My personal Demons
Deep down inside me this a dark thing that wants to break free. It has it grasp over
over me it makes me feel like life is'nt worth it all. Like death is the way out.I try
to fight it but its taking over.It's making me hurt my self and people around me.
It wants blood it needs a life.It's going to be the end of me the end of my life.I
could feel it i could feel its plan .It plans to drive me crazy it plans to take me
over. It plan's destroy all that i have all that i love .I know how to end it tring to
hurting other peole . The only way is having to end me. It's the only way to stop the pain
that it would make me cause
2007-03-21 11:11:01 · 5 answers · asked by bik_ko 3 in Social Science ➔ Psychology
Yes a good description of "No Sense of Control".
2007-03-21 11:20:39 · answer #1 · answered by janne5011 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its excellent. The best thing about poetry is when you can feel what the writer is feeling, and you have a gift for that. I would work on some of the punctuation, but other than that I think its excellent.
2007-03-21 18:45:04 · answer #2 · answered by TRae 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
either you are joking or not the writer is wrestling with the powers of destruction. Their is a battle for your soul. The writer in this poem has isolated himself and is single handily trying to defeat the devil. Jesus has defeated him and our battle is won. All we have to do is accept the gift Jesus gave us. Our deliverance from the devil is available if you accept Christ dieing on the cross for your sins. I would urge you to seek counseling.
2007-03-21 19:47:01 · answer #3 · answered by Dennis James 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well I think its dreadfully negative why would you write that I would first think about the epitome of what your thinking about
2007-03-21 18:19:16 · answer #4 · answered by Diva 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ITS PERFECT! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
2007-03-21 18:16:02 · answer #5 · answered by me! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋