what do you think of my first paragraph? All opinions wanted!?

Question

Society has a tendency to examine the rich and upper class. The general public is always curious as to how the aristocrats are acting and why they are acting that way. Sometimes it is as if the affluent live under society’s microscope. It is no different for Emily Grierson, a high-born citizen, in William Faulkner’s short story, “A Rose for Emily.” Emily is busy most of her life living up to her father’s and society’s standards that she is unable to form her own identity. William Faulkner uses symbolism, imagery and foreshadowing to explain the overall theme of how lonely life can become when one fails to form his or her own identity, and is forced to live in modern society’s culture.

Answer 1

Its an excellent paragraph with one exception


Emily is SO busy most of her life living up to her father’s and society’s standards that she is unable to form her own identity.

other than that, it's a.o.k. kiddo

= D

Hope that helps
(btw, nice usage of literary elements. It's especially impressive in the first paragraph...)


P.S.- Exalt means to celebrate or glorify... not examine or anything like that, you could say that they are "in the public eye" or lead "public lives, "their lives are not their own, they belong to society" or something along those lines...

Answer 2

William Faulkner uses symbolism, imagery and foreshadowing to explain the overall theme of how lonely life can become when one fails to form his or her own identity, and is forced to live in modern society’s culture.

You need a comma after imagery.....and I am not real sure what your thesis is but from what I read I am guessing that it is the sentence that says that William Faulkner uses symbolism, imagery, and foreshadowing. and you should also reconstruct this sentence it is in passive voice

and you dont have to say the general public just say public cause public is general

Hope this helps

Answer 3

I am a little puzzled by your analysis. You seem to imply that Emily's problems derive from her spoiled upper-class status, rather than from her gradual psychotic breakdown. Aren't we all forced to live in modern society's culture? And yet we don't all end up as necrophiliacs.

You might, however, be able to pull off the aristocratic hypothesis if you framed the story as a metaphor for the Civil War, with Emily representing the South's stubborn refusal to accept its own growing loss of relevance in the larger context of the national reality.

Answer 4

Here's my thoughts:

Society has a tendency to examine the rich and upper class.

Maybe use the word "exalt" instead of "examine?"

general public = middle and lower socioeconomic classes

"Emily is busy most of her life living up to..." = "Emily is consumed by living up to..."


I am sure people will give you lots of good advice here. :) Good luck! :)

Answer 5

In an constant effort to satisfy our curiosities about affluent people and their lifestyles, our society remains determined to find answers by closely examining them as often as we feel necessary.

Answer 6

My suggestions:

Society has a fascination with (or "is fascinated by" or "has always had a fascination for") the rich.

Emily spends so much of her life trying to live up to...(the "so" makes agreement with "that").

Answer 7

I really like it, but your thesis is a run on sentence. Break it up a little and it will be perfect!