Is this a good rap song?
Does anyone like rap? Is this a good rap song?
If you like rap like to rap or anything. Email me at gvchavez@bellsouth.net
My own song:
Since age ten I'd slit my wrists in the bathtub. Give my girlfriend a backrub. Watch faces of death and crack up.
When I was a kid mom would make me get edited versions shi**y remakes with no anti feminin cursin'. People i knew were so homophobic they got terrified seein a guy doin aerobics.
It all ended with one or two blast booms my teacher got mad. I blew her a** all over the classroom.
I wrote that in about 15 seconds the other day. It sounds better when you hear it. But There is no way to get you to hear it.
I had a rough and hectic childhood as a kid in case you wanted to know. I know its vulgar but this is how I feel sometimes. Dont bother answering if you hate rap or whatever.
No Im not Emo. Whatever that means. Say if you like it or not in your answers.
2007-03-20 19:24:16 · 12 answers · asked by Jackson B 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
u got some talent
2007-03-20 19:29:11 · answer #1 · answered by Selena Jade's Mommy 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
You are just putting down words that rhyme...not a good logical telling of a chain of events. I don't like this type of rhymes. I like clever, thought out, one idea leads to the next...not and alphabet soup of words flying past a person. I free style better than that!
I hate to disrespect another rapper or discourage you. However, find a style you like and channel your efforts toward their rhyme schemes. I have a college degree, but I've always written poetry. What are you trying to say with this rap? You have a VOICE when you rap. You have somebody's EAR. What ideas are you cramming into their HEAD?
People say they love my rhymes because I take time to "have something to say"...not just bunching up words. That's called SCRABBLE.
I've been compared to Tupac. So if you like somebody enough, they rub off on you. I am well known for my HOOKS too. You didn't have a hook. A song needs three stories...or verses and a hot hook that rides around you mind all day!
When you get famous without me...you can laugh in my face at the Grammy's...but I hope my advice helps you get there!
2007-03-21 02:48:42 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I love rap, man. Well, I must say honestly, that your rap poem needs more work. You must be more organize anout your topic. You say about rough child hod and mention your lady, giving her a backrub. Stick to your topic 'bout your rough life.
I encourage you to watch Def Poetry on cable if you have it. Maybe you can buy the first season. You'll like it and will find it sourceful to help you. Listen to old rappers like Tu Pac (although he raps about some fu**ed up issues). Pac's "Dear Mamma", and others portray his rough life in the ghetto. Also Bone Thugs and Harmony. They are one of the best. You also want to be surrounded by poetry of Robert Frost, Alicia Keys, Edgar Allen Poe, Elizabeth Browning, and Shakespear. Keep it up, man. You can do something about it. Good Luck and Peace!
2007-03-21 02:37:49 · answer #3 · answered by Drivliam 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you have good rhythm in your writing,liked the lyrics alot only problem is,it's all been done before the angst thing.I think your writing skills are wicked though and I think you could write different raps about other issues so as to not appear to be jumping on the Eminem band wagon.Try and write something else and post it,especially if you can write lyrics that quick post it again,write about anything else in your life or other things that concern,affect or interest you. ;o)
2007-03-21 02:32:11 · answer #4 · answered by snikleback 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was pretty graphic, but if it helps you release then for all means continue writing. If it is rap, poetry, freestyle, or even just a journal it is a great release and helps keep your mind fresh.
2007-03-21 02:30:38 · answer #5 · answered by ÐIESEŁ ÐUB 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's good. May I ask how old you are? Finish the song I'd like to hear the rest. :) Good luck to you, you're talented. I do poetry that's my thing so one website i love is rhymezone.com it can help you when you get stuck. Best of luck!
2007-03-21 02:30:13 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Personally, i think rap is crap. Except for Eminem, he's AWESOME!!. I sort of like your song. Hmm.... if only i could hear it.
2007-03-21 02:30:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's alright. If that's your personal issues then find some help.
2007-03-21 02:28:15 · answer #8 · answered by Andrew 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yea its hardcore but pretty good man keep it up
2007-03-21 02:27:26 · answer #9 · answered by sickskillz883 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Yeah you desent!
2007-03-21 02:26:27 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋