its called "walk away"
I don't want to hear it,
so just stop!
Close your mouth,
and just walk away,
even if it's just for the day,
at least I'll have some serenity,
without having to be pestered by you.
Can't you see,
I don't sympathize,
the words that come out of your mouth,
they seems like gibberish.
Trying to comprehend what you enunciate,
feels like,
I'm trying to understand bird talk.
I've tried so hard,
to understand you,
but it's just not functioning.
Maybe some other day,
I'll finally get you,
but for now,
please just let it be,
and walk away.
2007-03-20 15:26:08 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
great poem, i feel your anger!!!!!!!!!
2007-03-20 15:27:41 · answer #1 · answered by mom_princess77 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think it was a really good attempt, but it seems to be sort of immature (with lack of a better word). You certainly had emotion in it, but the poem lacked a good form and it seemed something you would hear at a coffee house open mic night, not published anywhere. I don't mean to crush any dreams or anything, but I'm sure that you and any other aspiring writer that puts their work out to be judged is well on their way to being published.
2007-03-20 23:00:20 · answer #2 · answered by Tuckoo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Should be addressed, Dear President Bush.
2007-03-20 22:28:59 · answer #3 · answered by thkitkat36 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its very typical of something a teenager would write , I guess. It sounds like lyrics. Maybe you can make it into a song.goodluck;-)
2007-03-20 22:35:39 · answer #4 · answered by Eliza 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not too shabby. almost sounds like the lyrics to a break up song lol
2007-03-20 22:28:34 · answer #5 · answered by F1reflyfan 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its pretty good. I like to write poems myself.. they are always good to let your feelings out if you need to
2007-03-20 22:35:34 · answer #6 · answered by felicia r 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Shallow, childish. Predictable. Very amateur.
Suggestion: delete your message.
2007-03-20 22:29:09 · answer #7 · answered by Up your Maslow 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i totally know where ur coming from...
great use of words and great meaning i think ull be a great poetic someday
2007-03-20 22:30:16 · answer #8 · answered by someebeooddyyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey that's pretty good! Good luck with it. You should try to publish it somewhere....
2007-03-20 22:28:46 · answer #9 · answered by ma.roddy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice!
2007-03-20 22:27:48 · answer #10 · answered by shipton52 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's good.
2007-03-20 22:27:40 · answer #11 · answered by Mike 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋