Poem. And she was gone...Do you like it Yes or No?

Question

She chose to walk alone
Though others wondered why
Refused to look before her,
Kept eyes cast upwards,
Towards the sky.-


She didn't have companions
No need for earthly things.
Only wanted freedom,
From what she felt were
Puppet strings.-


She longed to be a bird. That she might fly away.
She pitied every blade of grass
For planted they would stay.-


She longed to be a flame,
That brightly danced alone.
Felt jealous of the steam
That made the air its only home.-


Some say she wished too hard.
Some say she wished too long.
But we awoke one autumn day
To find that she was gone..-


The trees, they say stood witness.
The sky refused to tell.
But someone who had seen it said
The story played out well.-


She spread her arms out wide.
Breathed in the break of dawn.
She just let go of all she held...-


And then she was gone.

Answer 1

very good you have some talent
it could pass as lyrics to a popular song
good job and keep up the good work

Answer 2

Very nice - the only thing I would say is that the first few stanzas were a little jarring to me - being 5 lines instead of 4. So they read a bit awkwardly. Try reading it aloud and I think you will see what I mean. That may have been what you had in mind, I dont know. But the story and the imagry is beautiful. Thanks for sharing. Pax - C.

Answer 3

Yes

Answer 4

yes

Answer 5

i read it 3 times thru and it got better each time.
like

Answer 6

I really like it! Very interesting.

Answer 7

reminds me of "dont fear the reaper" by blue oyster cult... is that a bad thing?

Answer 8

Love it.

Answer 9

wow...this is awesome!
peace