My head
is large
and my
kneck hurts.
Give me a sandwich
to make the pain
go away.
2007-03-20 09:21:04 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
The "K" in neck is poetic license.
2007-03-20 10:46:04 · update #1
Oh yah, your right up there with Frost and Poe.
2007-03-20 10:15:42 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
As a writer I can tell you, even for abstract it doesn't make sense. I do like how you kept the words to a minimum but neck is spelled wrong and how does a sandwich make a headache go away?
2007-03-20 16:26:50 · answer #2 · answered by ambr95012 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm what can I say besides the word is neck not kneck? What kind of sandwhich would help? Pax - C.
2007-03-20 16:24:41 · answer #3 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Is this supposed to be a real poem?
2007-03-20 16:32:17 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Okay, pretty good, not very deep, but:
A.)kneck is spelled NECK
B.)Try to make it flow more smoothly
2007-03-20 16:29:03 · answer #5 · answered by spaldingpunk 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sadly, this is one of the best I've seen on here.
2007-03-20 16:31:39 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
is ur head large literally or metaphorically. and maybe ur neck hurts cuz ur head is too big.....just saying...
2007-03-20 16:44:13 · answer #7 · answered by iluvdrma 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Cool.. it's great , add one thing only, :
take my pen and burry it somewhere.
2007-03-20 16:38:01 · answer #8 · answered by sadafeh 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I don't get it. I would keep working on it.
2007-03-20 16:26:15 · answer #9 · answered by stepss1 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋