The day's just beginning
You see the girl you love
You don't know what to do or say
You're friends, you talk to eachother everyday
On the phone, computer, etc
You're walking with her
Talking, laughing, having the time of your life
The sun hits ya, you smile at her she smiles at you
It's time to say goodbye
You hug and walk off
You're walking, past places where we played as kids
Later you talk to eachother
Time's ending
You say you'll see eachother tomorrow
You know what
You're in goddamn love
Is there anything else better in the world
2007-03-19 12:41:17 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
very modern poem with some interesting rhythms i must say when you say it out.
you got a talent there. lolz
Now's my turn .haha
what do you think of this proposal I wrote?
http://www.changethis.com/proposals/918
If you like it please vote for it to be written
(Thanks to everyone who sees this and voted too!)
2007-03-19 12:46:49 · answer #1 · answered by Eric Chua Yanshan Maynas 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is very good but I don't like the "on the phone, computer, etc" part. I like it!!
2007-03-19 19:45:30 · answer #2 · answered by Michelle 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its like inbetween a poem and a song. I couldnt see it being read at thoses things where people snap there fingers and you read it slow and seriously. ik you know what i mean lol. But then i couldnt see it being sung. Idk
Its good. But i like when things ryme. =]
2007-03-19 19:46:40 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like someone has a spring in their step...I'm happy for you...Now give it to her...Let her know how you feel...Life is short....Good Luck..
2007-03-19 19:46:35 · answer #4 · answered by Gargirl™® 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's a nice poem =)
2007-03-19 19:49:08 · answer #5 · answered by Dee 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aww its really sweet. Good job. =)
2007-03-19 19:45:27 · answer #6 · answered by Jaded 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
...kind of bugs me how "eachother" isn't 2 words....
2007-03-19 19:47:22 · answer #7 · answered by tapping toes 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad at all.....i really liked to end of it to .....it was really nice.....nice job.....you should do more....
2007-03-19 19:51:24 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋