can you read this short essay and tell me what do you think?

Question

If there any mistakes and not organized well I would be very appreciative if you give your ideas and help me to orginize?

It's a good idea for many immigrants send their children back to theirnative countries during summer vacation. First of all, it's often difficult for immigrant parents communicate with their children. Because their children have different beliefs and opinions of life.Many immigrants children grow up in the USA and study in english. They learn english language,culture and have good communication with an american friends.Their feelings and reactions on anything is not the same like their parents have.Sometimes children have language difficulities becauseimmigrant parents can not speak english.

Answer 1

Glad to help. The corrections I've made are in CAPTAL letters. There should be 2 spaces after a period at the end of a sentence.

SINCE "ENGLISH" IS THE NAME OF A LANGUAGE, IT SHOULD ALWAYS BE CAPITALIZED.

It's a good idea for many immigrants TO send their children back to theirnative countries during summer vacation. First of all, it's often difficult for immigrant parents TO communicate with their children. (BECAUSE STARTS A DEPENDENT CLAUSE. THERE SHOULD BE A COMMA AND NOT A PERIOD AFTER "LIFE" IN THE NEXT SENTENCE) Because their children have different beliefs and opinions of life.Many immigrants children grow up in the USA and study in english. They learn THE english language (USE "AND" INSTEAD OF A COMMA BETWEEN ONLY TWO WORDS), culture and have good communication with an american friends. ("AN AMERICAN FRIEND" OR "AMERICAN FRIENDS" BUT NOT "AN AMERICAN FRIENDS") Their feelings and reactions on anything is (ARE) not the same like (THAT) their parents have.Sometimes (INSERT COMMA) children have language difficulities because SPACE immigrant parents can not speak english.

Answer 2

It is a good idea for many immigrants to send their children back to their native countries during summer vacation. First of all, it is often difficult for immigrant parents to communicate with their children. The children have different beliefs and opinions of life. Many immigrant children grow up in America and study in English. They learn the English language and culture and have good communications skills with American friends. The children's feelings and reactions regarding different things are not the same as their parents. Sometimes children have language difficulties because immigrant parents cannot speak English.

Answer 3

1) Second sentence, s/b "...it's often difficult for immigrant parents TO communicate"

2) Third sentence isn't really a sentence. Perhaps tack it on to the end of the second one.

3) Fourth sentence, "with an american friends", should be "with THEIR american friends"

4) Be careful of blanket statements like in the last two sentences "Their feelings are reactions on anything is not the same..." and "because immigrant parents can not speak English". Change it to "may not be the same" and "many immigrant parents may not speak English".

Answer 4

The first thing is to put to before send and put a space between theirnative. Second, another to between parents and communicate. Immigrant children not immigrants.Capital e in English all the time. No an american friends, just american friends. Space between becauseimmigrant. That's all I can find.

Answer 5

it makes sense, but i would put more creative (not made up) ideas in it.