Opinions on stories I'm writing....?

Question

ok story number 1:
Fruit - fruit is the story of th original sin according to eve. it discusses why she did it, how she feels about doing it, etc.
Gwendolyn and Rose - (title still needs working) set in the late 1600s, about two girls, gwendolyn, who is an english lady living alone in her family manor, and rosaleen, and Irish servant who has worked for her for as long as she can remember. ABout love, marriage, and a journey to america
Long Live the Queen - about a 13 year old girl whose parents die and make her queen... about her struggeles and learning her beliefs
Her Highness - about an english princess who is sick of the life and comes to an american boarding school
No Title - is about friends, Catherine and Adrienne, and how the death of Adriennes father 5 yrs ago and her mothers deteriorating mental condidtion makes adrienne spiral out of control
be bluntly honest with me about whether or not yo uwould read anything like this

Answer 1

Fruit. No way. The Adam and Eve story has been done to death by the middle of the twentieth century. No publisher would touch it with a ten foot pole.

Gwendolyn and Rose. Good idea, but must be heavily researched. Your settings should be precise and the language should be fairly consistent with that period. Just think, in the late 1600's people spoke like what you read in the King James Bible. Thee's Thou's etc.

Long Live the Queen. A possibility. Must either be masterfully written or have an additional twist to make it.

Her Highness. See my comments on Gwen and Co. above.

No Title. I would need more details of the plot. Interesting twists or again, masterfully written.

Now as for your question itself. Your writing stinks. It is sloppy with numerous typos and misspelled words. I would say you are nowhere near the position of writing a book and selling it. The first step in writing a book is FLAWLESS spelling and grammar. Second, there are many tricks to writing well, like no passive verbs, no adverbs, the proper combination of action and narration. The list goes on. If you want to write, you have a lot of work ahead of you.

No matter how great your idea is, if you cannot write well it will never be sold. Conversely, if you are a truly stellar writer, you could sell a novel about yourself walking to school.
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Answer 2

You are full of interesting ideas! I like the first one a lot. Have you ever read Mark Twain's The Diary of Adam and Eve? You should.

I see you have a lot of work ahead of you. Just remember to do your research. In the last one, you would have to do a lot of research on grief and mental health. On the 1600's one, I recommend you get yourself a book called a Descriptionary which will give you the correct terms for modes of transporation, clothing etc. from that century.

Your first step is to choose one, outline it, do some character studies and analysis, do the research and come up with a killer first line. The rest is the easy part.

Good luck. C.

Answer 3

They all sound interesting. I might read them if the author does a really good job of writing them. Good luck!

Answer 4

Your ideas sound interesting. I can't say more then that since I don't know your writing style.