see, i love to write. it's been my dream to have a book published with my grandmother's painting as the cover forever. I have one poem and a short science-fiction story published already, but i'll never stop writing.
the plays about this girl named Raven who is a princess in a poor kingdom, who is neighbors with a rich kingdom. Raven doesn't agree with her fathers methods, and thinks that if she could just rule in her father's place, the kingdom would be so much better.
The father sells Raven's happiness to the neighboring king, who's son doesn't want to mary Raven. If they DID marry, the two kingdom's would come together. but those two HATE eachother. Raven runs away, and meets a boy from the neighboring kingdom. they fall in love, but they can't be together because of her father.
what should i do now? I'm thinking that Raven and the prince from the other town should work together to get out of the marrage. Help!!!"This is copywrited" so please don't steal it! i really need help!!
2007-03-19 07:01:48 · 6 answers · asked by Aurora_Rose_Maree 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Theater & Acting
You are dealing in a genre that not everyone "gets." But I think you just need the story structure to move forward, then conflict and energy will take care of itself. Movies and romance novels always emphasize plot very heavily. Borrow some story devices from romance novels, and check out screenwriting books for ideas. The name Raven can be awesome in your story. Go for it!
2007-03-20 16:21:45 · answer #1 · answered by Tekguy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm loving the story but agree with the others about the name "Raven".
I think you should have the Prince turn out to be her brother. Her father could be his father who offers Raven in order to keep the secret underwraps. Raven's lover finds this out but is blackmailed by her father. He offers the lover part of the riches he will gain after Raven's wedding. The lover has to decide whether money or raven is what he wants. run with it
I have more ideas but not much time to type them...ask me if ur interested.
Great Storyline so far!!
2007-03-19 15:18:51 · answer #2 · answered by a Spelman Jag 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The thing about writing is keeping your audiences' interests into continuing to read the story until the end.
I would definitely throw twists into the story...such as maybe the father isn't the one making the decisions and it is an adviser who is a trusted allie and friend that is secretly plotting to take over the kingdom and the son of the neighboring kingdom who she hates and doesn't want to marry finds this out.....Keep your audience entralled.
2007-03-19 16:12:43 · answer #3 · answered by belen2499 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate to tell you this, but editors will automatically rate you as an amateur if your main character is named Raven, Morrigan, Rhiannon, Rain, or any other name about which a teenager would say "that's so cool." At least name her something that everyone and his dog isn't already sending in, like Nightshade, or Bess, or something.
That said, if you know your characters, just interview them, and they'll pull the story out of your brain for you, exactly the way they want it to be written. They'll let you know.
2007-03-19 14:23:37 · answer #4 · answered by Heather 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your story is very mediocre, you need to be "different". Yours is a typical girl meets boy, girl & boy fall in illicit love with many obstacles, blah, blah, blah....
Why not make it more today, and more believable.. Raven (don't like her name either) lives in a town where her Dad is mayor and because of the many relationships he has forged to get there, promises his Intern (who happens to be the son of his lawyer) that he can meet his daughter. They meet, she dislikes him, he has the hots for her (immature in love experiences) and her father encourages him...
Meanwhile at an away track meet, Raven (yuck! name) stops to get gas at a gas station before heading home and meets _________________, the cashier at the station...
Blah, blah, Blah, her Dad tells her she should marry his Intern and begins pressuring her. He seems obsessed with the idea and very adamant....
She runs away to be with _________________, the cashier and they live in an abandoned barn for a week. While there they find a trunk up in the loft and open it... Inside are newspapers from the year before she was born......... A specific headline catches her eye and she reads about it....
YOU take it from there.................
2007-03-19 14:23:26 · answer #5 · answered by Patricia D 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I say you should do what you want to do and you should get inside the heads of you characters and see what they would do. Or should there e an unexpected turn and somthing happens and the characters change.
2007-03-19 14:08:23 · answer #6 · answered by caffinator 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋