We had to write an epitaph for ethan fromme (book) and I was wondering if you could give me some feedback. I am trying to stay away from rhyme
Have you seen me...the man walking through the village,
With the heartsick eyes and gaunt face,
Worn by love and its fatality.
Worn by the years that have passed all too slowly.
Once I was young.
Once I was in love.
Once I was avid.
Once I was zealous,
Now my life is all too forgettable...
I pledged my eternity to an unbearable woman.
And day after day I regretted the decision.
My life had been signed away on the dotted line.
But there was promise in my desolate life.
A pure glimmer of hope.
A beauty and youth incomparable to any other.
She filled my lungs with life.
And after the smashing sucked them dry again.
In death it seems I am finally complete.
My soul has rejoined my body,
And my body, the sublunary.
Where, just in life, I can be treaded on all over again.
With the final peace of a silent grave.
2007-03-18
15:24:03
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gravytrain036
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IF you have a rewrite for one of the lines or something please share.
2007-03-18
15:28:18 ·
update #1