ok this is also my sis's poem. Once again, she's almost 14.
Here it is... the name is "At Least for the Day"
My eyes turn bloodshot,
as my body trembles,
I plug my ears,
I just can't take it anymore,
can't take the,
nagging,
pestilence,
antagonism,
rivalry,
demoralization,
brutality,
or even the bellows or blows i recieve,
my hands shake,
at every sound she makes,
can't she just go away,
and save me from my,
pain,
depression,
or anger?
Why can't she just leave?
"Leave!" I say,
"at least for the day!"
SO WHAT DO U THINK OF HER POEM? I LIKE THIS ONE MORE... SHE WANTS U TO RATE IT ON A SCALE OF 1 TO 10.......THANKS!
2007-03-18 13:32:58 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
around 5 .......
2007-03-18 13:35:35 · answer #1 · answered by asphyxia 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the older sis is an angel. I think the younger sis is writing this poem abt. the older one but the older one is acting her age and still helping out baby sis! So, my score for this poem is a 2.
2007-03-18 20:57:03 · answer #2 · answered by Anpadh 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
My eyes turn bloodshot,
as my body trembles,
I close my eyes,
I just can't take it anymore,
Just can't take it
Boring
Repetitive
Angsty
Over and
Over
One more Line i cannot read
My hands shake
At every poem i read
can't she just go away,
and save me from my,
pain,
depression,
or anger?
Why can't she just Stop?
"Stop!" I say,
"No poems for at least one day!"
2007-03-19 13:58:09 · answer #3 · answered by hq3 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I scale this poem a 10. I scale it a 10 because it shows that this person is going through some rough times. Shows someone who is going through something that is hurting them inside emotionally.
2007-03-18 20:40:10 · answer #4 · answered by apple_bottoms_4637 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
-2
2007-03-18 20:45:27 · answer #5 · answered by bill 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I don't know about rating it, but it looks like your sis has some real issues from someone who she deems is tormenting her|
It almost looks like what she wrote is a cry for help|
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2007-03-18 21:57:10 · answer #6 · answered by Catholic Philosopher 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
10. sounds like she has a lot of anger towards her mother, and is jealous of her siblings. she needs to talk to some one.
2007-03-18 22:01:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think its good poem-wise ( 7 ? ) but its just not my style frankly it scares me a little ( 3 ) but its ok
2007-03-18 20:37:18 · answer #8 · answered by FaithC 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
One; it's cliched and boring.
2007-03-18 20:36:47 · answer #9 · answered by Spex 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What time is it knou? Sorry, I not speak ingles.
2007-03-18 20:42:27 · answer #10 · answered by violet 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
umm i would say almost 10 its PERFECT! I LIKE THIS ONE
2007-03-18 20:37:00 · answer #11 · answered by Shannon 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋