I wrote your name in the sky,
but the wind blew it away.
I wrote your name in the sand,
but the waves washed it away.
I wrote your name in my heart,
and forever it will stay.
its amazing how a heart can hold on
to those little things we cherish
or memeories we wish would just perish
but whatever path your heart goes through
just follow the one you think is true
2007-03-18 12:33:45 · 12 answers · asked by monique h 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
" You misspelled "mammories". " LMAO
what an idiot i know you meant memories
good poem i like it
-AQA
2007-03-18 12:37:56 · answer #1 · answered by AnonymousQuestionerAnswerer 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like both of the poems, but the second one doesn't flow as well- too many syllables on the 3rd line.
Same with the fourth line- just take out the word 'but'
Otherwise, i like both.
2007-03-18 19:43:12 · answer #2 · answered by Kitty 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Those are really good! I especially liked the first one, that's cute, sweet, and sincere at the same time. The second one has a good point, too. Did you write those?
2007-03-18 19:45:49 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the first one is awesome! But I'm not sure about the second one?
2007-03-18 19:37:56 · answer #4 · answered by talent show in itself 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Im pretty sure I've heard the first one before, you didn't write it, right?
2007-03-18 19:40:15 · answer #5 · answered by Jai 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
are we looking at a future poet here? keep up the good work. =) good job
2007-03-18 19:41:19 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2007-03-18 19:37:28 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds good. Keep it up!
2007-03-18 19:36:47 · answer #8 · answered by Susie Q. 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the poem is well written. Did you wright them??
2007-03-18 19:50:47 · answer #9 · answered by mnpeterson31 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it alot! Did you write it???
2007-03-18 19:36:17 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋