My beloved went away from me
He stole the solace of my heart
He left behind the shadow of sorrow
Now nothing is left besides this sorrow
There were only tears
Now tears too have been washed away
My heartbeats says I should stop now somewhere
...Here
2007-03-18 07:25:33 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It's good.
2007-03-18 07:30:05 · answer #1 · answered by You Lames! 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
7 out of 10
2007-03-18 07:30:54 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Do you even know what "solace" means?
Do a grammar check- "heartbeats says" is not proper English.
You used "sorrow" twice in the same poem!
2007-03-18 07:53:22 · answer #3 · answered by Becky 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you've suggested a lot in this! And a lot actuality... that's a superb write, LC. What jumped out at me maximum, for some reason, were right here strains: look into the reflect that souls reflect- wrestle the forces that inspire ignore. thanks for sharing.
2016-12-02 04:35:50 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well the content is good, but try to make it rhyme it doesnt need to rhyme but that makes it sound better, by the way is it true?
2007-03-18 07:34:09 · answer #5 · answered by danger609569 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think that it is an great poem
2007-03-18 16:59:12 · answer #6 · answered by kawboys1 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
yes.. you should stop
2007-03-19 09:02:24 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋