A friend came to me so full of sorrow
He said he's leaving come tomorrow
His wife was seeing our friends brother
And before him, there was another
She's played it like it was a game
But deep inside, she hides her shame
She really loves him like no other
But over's crave her, as a lover
I'm sure their marriage I can save
I can reach her, and she behave
And so before, this day ends
I'll talk to her, they'll make amends
She now wants to give him heart and soul
But she sealed her fate, she dug her hole
If you lead this life, feel no surprise
A tempted life and cause demise
And in the end they parted ways
He found a lover, through those days
And now that the tables turned
She cries at night, a lesson learned
2007-03-18 03:34:00 · 10 answers · asked by gary_b04901 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Marriage & Divorce
8+..
2007-03-18 03:44:57 · answer #1 · answered by Donna 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
4
2007-03-18 11:43:23 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
7
2007-03-18 10:47:14 · answer #3 · answered by MOM OF ONE 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I didn't like the first two and a half paragraphs at all. It really sounded like rambling to me. It just didn't sound right. The last two and half paragraphs however were pretty darn good. I would give the first part a 1 and the last part an 8. How did the same person right both parts and they are so different?!
2007-03-18 12:35:10 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you tried to save the marriage, then why did the guy end up with another girl? Is this a poem to bring the woman down?
If that woman is trying to work out, she deserves a second chance if that man is also wanting her back.
This poem is pretty good but would add insult to injury for sure.
SEVEN (7)
2007-03-18 11:09:28 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cheating should only be rated as the worst and
for that reason I am giving it a 0.
2007-03-18 17:51:51 · answer #6 · answered by RudiA 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7.
2007-03-18 10:41:56 · answer #7 · answered by Eden 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im sticking with rudi hope he don't mind 0 for cheaters
2007-03-21 21:01:48 · answer #8 · answered by sweetgranny06 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. 10 do you mind if i copy it and keep it?
2007-03-18 10:49:17 · answer #9 · answered by Worried wife 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
3...sorry, I'm not into the whole forced-rhyming thing. It makes it sound juvenile.
2007-03-18 11:14:09 · answer #10 · answered by in love love love... 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋