I typed this essay, it for a DBQ. What are your thoughts?

Question

Much of our today’s society can be traced back to the Ancient Greek empire. The Greeks had made so many contributions to our modern civilization such as the architecture, medicine, and the Olympics.
One of the most known contributions made from the Greeks was the remarkable architecture. For example, the White House has Ionic columns, which is just one of the three columns that were originated in Greek times. There are other buildings such as the Lincoln Memorial and Fifth Avenue School that include the columns too. But, not just the columns were kept from the Greek culture. The most famous building in Athens, the Parthenon, was completely hand carved, out of marble. The New York Public Library was also carved out of marble.
Another one of the things bestowed by the Greeks was medicine. Around 400 B.C. a man named Hippocrates lived. He was the first known Greek to use science and experiment to determine the best cure for a particular illness. He promised that only his patients would benefit. He also said he will give no deadly medicine if asked. Today this is called the Hippocratic oath. Before anyone becomes a doctor he or she must pledge to this oath.
The most known Greek tradition is the Olympics. Every four years this worldwide event takes place in a different venue each year, unlike in Greece when it always took place at Mount Olympus. This tradition today has men and women competing, but in ancient Greece only the men competed. Without the Greeks the Olympics may not exist. In fact, about 800 years after they were originated, the Olympics faded away. But this tradition was revived in the 1800’s and still lives to this day.
The Greeks influenced the modern society with their astonishing contributions such as their amazing architecture, the extremely helpful medicine, and the worldwide Olympics. Without the Greek empire, our contemporary civilization, would be dissimilar.

Answer 1

This is really not bad at all. I hope you get a good grade.

But, what about other cultures and their contributions, such as the Egyptians and Chinese.

I always hear a lot about the Greek culture I think because it is the easiest to write about but the world does not begin or end with one culture.

Answer 2

Ancient Greece Dbq

Answer 3

"It is" not "it". What was the Question?

Quite honestly if you believe that the main achievement of the Greeks was the Olympics you have the bull by the tail.

Please give much less emphasis to this than the intellectual and philosophical contributions made by Plato, Aristotle, Pythagoras and a dozen other brilliant men whose Stella reasoning still eclipses much of the thinking that has ever happened since.

Your other observations are good but less important.



By the way THERE WAS NO GREEK EMPIRE!

Answer 4

I disagree with your closing, but it is a well organized essay. You make your points clearly and with examples.

Good jobs.