my poem???
My first
was you
anytime I needed help you were there to guide me through
it was you
who, had my heart
from the start
we were friends
until we grew and thought we would never part
...
Together for 2 years
you were far but near
I had fears
that the day will come
that we would no longer have fun
so much that you will never come
just because you didn't get some
now you go to someone
one, you had no feelings for
you left the one you adored
my heart never felt so sore
yet there was a knock at the door
it was you realizing that the one
you left meant so my more
What do you think? I just started writing poems, this is just a couple lines from one of my poems.
2007-03-16 16:20:51 · 9 answers · asked by atcblue05 6 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Actually I'm not 14, I'm a young adult, just to let you know.
2007-03-16 16:28:53 · update #1
Yes, this is about a relationship I was recently in.
2007-03-16 16:30:18 · update #2
it was a good text, but the rhymes were unorganized, and it was hard to keep up with the float of the poem
but keep writing. u'll get better as u go
2007-03-16 16:26:40 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was really quite good especially since you just started writing. Keep it up you'll only get better.
2007-03-16 16:31:25 · answer #2 · answered by Mrs. Fuzzy Bottoms 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
damn and then people wonder about ADULTS not writing questions on here! Another example of some 14 yr old all upset Mr. Right broke up with her!
2007-03-16 16:24:34 · answer #3 · answered by Screaming Banshee 3 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Yes it's good I love it
2007-03-16 16:28:50 · answer #4 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. I love it.
Did it happen to you?
2007-03-16 16:24:55 · answer #5 · answered by Montez Grl 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its very good, no matter how old you are.
2007-03-16 16:31:59 · answer #6 · answered by psst.... its me 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
aww thats really good! sad :'( but really good :)
2007-03-16 16:27:18 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sleep.........
2007-03-16 16:26:07 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
THat was BETTER THAN MINE!
2007-03-16 17:41:48 · answer #9 · answered by 2 Minutes ago 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋