I was playing around with writing a Twee pop style song here is what I came up with
"The Picnic"
On the green grass,
There was a basket made of wicker
Were we sat and laughed and snickered
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Is it a good start? or does it rhyme to much? Any ideas for lyrics that could be added to what I started? :)
2007-03-16 05:56:34 · 2 answers · asked by 1 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
MORE LYRICS
The fire fly flew and flickered,
something something never bickered? (maybe?)
2007-03-16 06:02:04 · update #1
I could do that but that is not where I was I was trying to go with it. I was trying to make a happy song. :) LOL
2007-03-16 08:01:23 · update #2
I've been listening to murder ballads by Nick Cave and The Bad Seeds and your song starts out like those songs. It's all fun and roses till somebody gets killed.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uHdNCHomHlU
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7XbehX3W8N0
You can turn it from cheesy to haunting.
2007-03-16 06:26:05 · answer #1 · answered by gregory_dittman 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i can definitely see those lyrics turning into a twee song- keep it up!
2007-03-19 22:46:21 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋