I have a novel idea in my head. Tell me how it sounds. The hero has a kid and it is his birthday. It is part of their tradition to go to the store exactly when his kid was born which was 3:05 AM and buy him something. The hero alog with his 4 friends go to the store. There the lights go out and his kid is in the restroom. The hero later founds out that this was all part of a plan to kidnap his child and the villain wants something that he won't tell. He asks tom to do different things that will enable him to get this thing done. With his son in captive, the hero must go and do what the villain wants. He already lost some of his friends revolting and the villain is always a step ahead. The story will be set in a dark store and there will be a lot of got you surprises and also suspense, thrill, and impact
2007-03-16 04:08:43 · 5 answers · asked by Vijay B 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Movies
I would place the movie in a mall rather than a department store.
2007-03-16 04:28:13 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
The setup needs work. Why would someone celebrate a kid's birthday at three in the morning? Also, what could the villain want that's inside besides robbing the store or an adjacent business?
It might work better if the father is bringing his kid home from the emergency room, stops at the pharmacy to fill the prescription, the lights go out briefly and the kid is gone when they come back. He has to find his kid to give the medicine to bring down the fever. He should be alone as it makes it harder.
2007-03-18 04:14:53 · answer #2 · answered by Harbinger 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
. . .Maybe. . .maybe you could get somewhere, but there's lots of gaps you'd have to fix. At 3:05AM only a 24hr store would be open and that means it wouldn't be dark. Maybe a store shouldn't be the setting, see? Do you have a connection established between the hero and the villain--what's the villain's motive? If the villain knows this tradition, he must know the hero and his kid pretty well.
2007-03-16 04:56:18 · answer #3 · answered by Raingirl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Maybe... It still sounds a little weak. However you could go in any direction with it. Like the kid is the bad guy or one of the friends are, etc. But, i dont know, it's deffantly missing somthing. Try maybe writing it in the first person like the hero is telling the story about how his life was so great then turned into a night of hell as he is going through all of this stuff.
2007-03-16 04:17:28 · answer #4 · answered by Matt 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As a bookworm, i might might desire to vote for the e book version. There are only extra layers to a e book than there are to a action picture. each and every thing in a action picture must be condensed all the way down to a pair of hours, yet a e book has the luxurious of working onwards into territory action picture won't have the ability to touch. Plus, with video clips, they have an inclination to be "Hollywoodized" to sell tickets. Holly Golightly selections the boy and the cat and that all of them stay fortunately ever after. Deep psychological arguments approximately existence and sentience and morals get decrease so Will Smith can blow up robots. video clips are made via committee, yet books are made via your mind's eye on my own.
2016-10-18 12:53:29 · answer #5 · answered by fugere 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋