i was sure that its gona be okay
u were too till the end of that day
i will always live the good times n pray
i tried to move on but i couldnt this way
all the time that we spent together
it was supposed to be like that forever
dark memories they surround me
my hearts dead now u cant find me
trust me u dont need a weapon to kill
its what u say some words they will
its gonna be real long till my wishes fulfill
i wake up all night poppin sleepin pills
i know people who r more hurt than i
theyr alive but are always wishin they die
thinkin bout life they sit n they cry
they belive in a miracle to happen sometime
evryday life gets a little more worse for me
this pain n the suffering its a curse for me
its not what u think its not what u see
times are so rough for us u wouldnt belive
people like us are diffrnt frm the rest
our souls are alive while our bodies are dead
we're falling into an endless pit
there's no bottom we could possibly hit
2007-03-15 20:41:47 · 11 answers · asked by Random Dude 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
u r very gud at writing..
u must continue,,...
best of luck
2007-03-15 20:48:31 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
the words speak out, and your mind grabs hold
and suddenly the wolrd unfolds.
in your own image, your own mind
where everything you want you find
lying behind a drawn blind
you sit unable to unwind
its all you think its all you feel
and its something that makes you feel unreal.
and it makes you so alive
that you leave your body behind.
follow it.
2007-03-15 20:51:04 · answer #2 · answered by Carcin Ogin 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it... is there a chorus or something? Very deep and personal. Let me know when u get it published... i'd buy a copy! ♥
2007-03-15 20:46:14 · answer #3 · answered by lynn 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"walk on the Wild part" - Lou Reed "inn California' - Eagles 'Smoke on the Water' - Deep pink "Alice's eating place" - Arlo Guthrie "taking photos action picture star" - undesirable organisation "The devil Went right down to Georgia" - The Charlie Danials Band "warm Rod Lincoln" - Commander Cody and His lost Planet Airmen "Take the money and Run" - Steve Miller Band "summer Of sixty 9" - Bryan Adams "Rocky Raccoon' - Lennon/McCartney "Maxwell's Silver Hammer - Lennon/McCartney "Glory Days" - Bruce Springsteen "Jack and Diane" - John Mellencamp "Sloop John B" - The coastline Boys 'The Boxer" - Simon & Garfunkle "Rock N Roll Band" - Boston "American Band" - Grand Funk Railroad 'Spill the Wine" - Eric Burdon & conflict "signs and indicators" - 5 guy electric powered Band "Pinball Wizard" - The Who "Tweeter And The Monkey guy" - vacationing Wilburys "The conflict Of Evermore" - Led Zeppelin "Janies have been given A Gun' - Aerosmith "hurricane" - Bob Dylan "the day previous" - Paul McCartney "Centrefold' - J. Geils Band "Eleanor Rigby' - The Beatles "Piano guy" - Billy Joel "final Dance With Mary Jane" - Tom Petty & The Heartbreakers
2016-10-01 00:17:39 · answer #4 · answered by intriago 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's very good and true-to-life. Keep writing!
2007-03-15 20:53:52 · answer #5 · answered by gulfbreeze8 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You can if yoU wanT.No one was a poet from the first day of his life...:D
2007-03-15 20:46:50 · answer #6 · answered by taqua_12 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
And for eternity we shall live forever
And find the reasons why together.....
P.s Really good...even though its sad...............good luck
2007-03-15 20:46:35 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
u should definitely continue writing, it s good.
2007-03-15 20:46:54 · answer #8 · answered by kitten 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, not bad! It's up to you. I like it! But you need a name......
2007-03-15 20:45:04 · answer #9 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
find another profession
2007-03-15 20:48:39 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋