Is anyone a good proof reader?

Question

I have to turn this essay tommorow and I need someone to proof read it, PLEASE.
The business letter is the basic means of communication between two companies. It is a document typically sent externally to those outside a company but is also sent internally to those within a company. Most business letters have a formal tone. The business letter establishes a permanent record of the information enclosed. The three main critical points when writing any business communications are to identify audience, purpose and desired results. In order to deliver an effective communication the needs and interest of the readers should be researched first.
First the audience must be analyzed and then the purpose can be determined. The typical audience is other professionals. However, it might also include co-workers. These audiences generally are required to provide a detailed background about the purpose. Determining the audience is important as it aids in choosing the right language and level of detail. The audience needs and expectations must be addressed for writing to be effective, so word choice and tone must cater to these needs.
The next step is to establish the purpose of the communication. The purpose of the letter must be stated clearly and not leave the reader questioning what he just read. Writing business letters is used to inform readers of specific information. However, it might also be used to persuade others to take action or to propose ideas. Business letters can even function as advertisements at times. For example, letters from long-distance phone companies sent to those not signed up for their services or the cover letter of a resume. Both of these serve to promote or advertise.
Business letters can be challenging to write, because the readers’ attention can be hard to keep if a letter is not written properly. This is particularly the case if the readers receive large amounts of mail and have little time to read.


The last step is to deliver the desired result. This stage is the action paragraph. The writer should state the action needed from the reader.

Answer 1

Spelling and puctuation are all correct EXCEPT: "For example, letters from long distance (NO HYPHEN HERE) phone companies sent to those not signed up for their services, (ADD COMMA HERE) or the cover letter of a resume". Other than that, it's a little wordy but correct.

Answer 2

The business letter is the basic means of communication between two companies. It is a document typically sent externally to those outside a company but is also sent internally to those within a company. Most business letters have a formal tone. The business letter establishes a permanent record of the information enclosed. The three main critical points when writing any business communications are to identify THE audience, purpose and desired results. In order to deliver an effective communication the needs and interestS of the readers should be researched first.
First, the audience must be analyzed and then the purpose can be determined. The typical audience IS ALSO professional. However, it might also include co-workers. These audiences ARE generally required to provide a detailed background about the purpose. Determining the audience is important, as it aids in choosing the right language and level of detail. The needs and expectations OF THE AUDIENCE must be addressed for writing to be effective, so word choice and tone must cater to these needs.
The next step is to establish the purpose of the communication. The purpose of the letter must be stated clearly and not leave the reader questioning THE PURPOSE. Writing business letters is used to inform readers of specific information. However, it might also be used to persuade others to take action or to propose ideas. Business letters can even function as advertisements at times. For example, letters from long-distance phone companies sent to those not signed up for their services. ANOTHER EXAMPLE WOULD BE the cover letter of a resume. Both of these serve to promote or advertise.
Business letters can be challenging to write, because the readers’ attention can be hard to keep if a letter is not written properly. This is particularly the case if the readers receive large amounts of mail and have little time to read.
The last step is to deliver the desired result. This stage is the action paragraph. The writer should state the action needed from the reader.
I THINK YAHOO CUT YOUR PAPER OFF, I CAN'T SEE YOUR ENDING. HOPE THIS HELPS :)

Answer 3

My proposed changes are in parantheses. Good luck!


(A) business letter is the basic means of communication between two companies. It is a document typically sent externally to those outside a company(,) but is also sent (remove redundant) to those within a company. Most business letters have a formal tone (change to Business letters often have a formal tone). The business letter establishes a permanent record of the information enclosed (contained within). The three main critical points when writing (a) business communications (missive) are to identify (an) audience, purpose and (the) desired result (or results). In order to (effectively communicate) the needs and interest of the readers should (first) be researched.
First(,) the audience must be analyzed and (second) the purpose (should be) be determined. The typical audience (for such communications) is (typically) other professionals. However, it might also (address) co-workers. These audiences generally are required to provide a detailed background about the purpose (of the communication). Determining the audience is important as it aids in choosing the right language and level of detail. The audience('s) needs and expectations must be addressed for writing to be effective(;) so (choice of) words and tonality must cater to these needs.
The next step is to establish the purpose of the communication. The purpose of the letter must be stated clearly and not leave the reader questioning what he (has) just read. Writing business letters is used to inform readers of specific information. However, it might also be used to persuade others to take action or to propose ideas. (At times) Business letters can even function as advertisements. (examples are) letters from long-distance phone companies sent to those not signed up for their services or the cover letter of a resume. Both of these serve to promote or advertise.
Business letters can be challenging to write, because the readers’ attention (may) be hard to (maintain)(should) a letter not (be) written properly. This is particularly the case if the readers receive large amounts of mail and have little time to read.


The last step is to deliver the desired result. This stage is (fulfilled through) the action paragraph. The writer should state the action needed from the reader.

Answer 4

The business letter is the basic means of communication between two companies. It is a document typically sent externally to those outside a company but is also sent internally to those within a company. Most business letters have a formal tone. The business letter establishes a permanent record of the information enclosed. The three main critical points when writing any business communications are to identify audience, purpose and desired results. In order to deliver an effective communication the needs and interest of the readers should be researched first.
[[[First]]] [[[ delete the word first because it was the last word of the previous sentence and is not required this sentence.]]] the audience must be analyzed and then the purpose can be determined. The typical audience is[[[CONSISTS OF rather than is]]] other professionals. However, it might also include co-workers. These audiences generally are required to provide a detailed background about the purpose.

Answer 5

look for the {} below, dog. Also the last paragraph needs more meat. Looks good otherwise.
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The next step is to establish the purpose of the communication. The purpose of the letter must be stated clearly and not leave the reader questioning what he just read. Writing business letters is used to inform readers of specific information. {However,-i WOULD CHANGE TO , however....} it might also be used to persuade others to take action or to propose ideas. Business letters can even function as advertisements at times. For example, letters from long-distance phone companies sent to those not signed up for their services or the cover letter of a resume. Both of these serve to promote or advertise.
Business letters can be challenging to write, because the reader{s’- should be reader's} attention can be hard to keep if a letter is not written properly. This is particularly the case if the readers receive large amounts of mail and have little time to read.
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Answer 6

Many of the answerers below are mistaken. A proof reader watches for typos and punctuation errors. It is the editor's job to make sure that the writing is clear and makes sense. Very few editors will tolerate the grammatical opinions of proof readers. I know this because I have done all three jobs, writing, editing and proof reading. The editor's job is distinctly a challenging one. Proof reading is rote work, and a bit tedious after a while.

Answer 7

The audience needs and expectations must be addressed

I would say the audience's needs
I would also change the First to the first step since you're using first 2x in a row.

Answer 8

i don't know if im a "good proof reader", but I'll try!!!...

ok first of all im pretty sure your supposed to indent the first line of each paragraph. Then in the 5th sentence in the first paragraph you need a comma between "purpose" and "and." Then another comma in the first sentence in the second paragraph between "first" and "the" and between "analyzed" and "and" in that same sentence. Then the last thing i found is that your sentence in the third paragraph that starts like "For example..." is a fragment.

Answer 9

Separate your paragraphs. Lose the archaic term of "in order to" and simply say, "To deliver an effective communication . . ."

Never use the word 'however' at the start of a sentence unless you mean "in whatever way," such as: "However you want to do it is fine with me." Every sentence that starts with 'however' in your manuscript should be substituted for such words as 'nevertheless, albeit,' 'nonetheless,' and so on.

Go back through your piece and insert needed commas.

Otherwise, well done!

Answer 10

The only spot I can see is " the needs and interest of the readers ". I think either interest should be plural or change to " the need and interest of the reader". Hope this helped.