Which is a better poem(easy,just read!)?

Question

You Already Know

I would say "I LOVE YOU"
But you already know
I would prove that I care for you
But it already shows
I don't know why I feel this way
But thats the way it goes
Out of a garden oof flowers
You're the deep red rose
When I see you I still get chills
Through my head, fingers, and toes
And again I would mumble "I LOVE YOU"
But of course...you already know



I FEEL.

I feel happy on the outside but do they see beyond that?
I feel sad on the inside becuause i know they dont.
I feel loved but yet unloved at the same time.
Why I feel this way, I dont know.
I feel lonely, but yet im with people I love.
I feel content, but inside im screaming.
I feel angry, but i want to hug someone.
Why I feel this way, I dont know.
All that I do know, is that i can feel.

Answer 1

i liked the first one, it made me smile. i really liked the way you used repetition with saying ', you already know.'

i know you didn't ask but i like this one better than' i feel,' because you paid more attention to the rhyming in this one. i know rhyming isn't the only part to good poetry but i've always like the old fashion poetry that rhymed as apposed to prose.

Answer 2

Well , I feel is a thorough examination of a moment when
you feel clear headed. This does not make the journey any
less difficult. Though you were not the first person, or perhaps not the writer these works are highly containment and prosaic form. The highly distinguishes the trade off of old
love sonnet, and makes this activated in metaphor. This is
a good opener for writing for hours after the sensation is
subdued and the world is at peace.

Answer 3

The wording is good for either one, but neither have a consistent meter or foot. Structure is what you need more of to make a better poem. Iambic pentameter is the most common foot and meter, but there are other options that work. Do a search on foot and meter of poems and then look at your poems again.

Good luck, you've got a good start.

Answer 4

I personally like You Already Know. Both are good though!!

Answer 5

I like You Already Know much better.

Answer 6

They are both great. My personal favorite is the first one: you already know. I think it speaks to a great relationship.

Answer 7

They are both really good! :D

Did you write that yourself? It's really good, you have talent. I wish I could write like that.

Answer 8

The first one really touches me. Please keep writing and writing. You have talent! Get a good education, keep learning and living and most importantly, KEEP WRITING!

Answer 9

"You Already Know" is better poetry, but "I Feel" is more interesting.

Answer 10

you already know is much better
peace