Is my sentence correct?

Question

It's for a college application, please tell me how to make it better: (it's asking for me to describe an interesting educational or work experience, does this count?)

I volunteer weekly with Adult Literacy, a tutoring group that help convicted and abused men and women to obtain GEDs. Every time is interesting for me to see people from all walks of lives coming together to learn. Once, I tutored a mother along with her daughter. The mother told me that her husband tried to stab her to death. And while I was speechless, she described how her and her daughter’s lives will improve if they can obtain their GEDs faster.

Thanks

Answer 1

I volunteer weekly with Adult Literacy, a tutoring group that help [HELPS] convicted and abused men and women to obtain THEIR GEDs. Every time [DELETE EVERY TIME, TRY IT IS ALWAYS] is interesting for me to see people from all walks of lives [LIFE] coming together to learn. Once, I tutored a mother along with her [DELETE ALONG WITH HER, USE AND INSTEAD] daughter. The mother told me that her husband tried to stab her to death. And while I was speechless, she described how her and her daughter’s lives will improve if they can obtain their GEDs faster.

Answer 2

I volunteer weekly with Adult Literacy, a tutoring group that helps convicted and abused men and women to obtain GEDs.

It's always interesting for me to see people from different walks of life coming together to learn. Once, I tutored a mother along with her daughter. The mother told me that her husband tried to stab her to death. I was speechless! She described how she and her daughter’s lives will improve if they can obtain their GEDs faster.

I think this is right now, but don't quote me on it!

Answer 3

CORRECTED:

I volunteer weekly with Adult Literacy, a tutoring roup that helps convicted and abused men and women obtain GEDs. Every time I go, it is interesting for me to see people from all walks of life coming together to learn. Once, I tutored a mother along with her daughter. The mother told me that her husband had tried to stab her to death. While I sat speechless, she described how her and her daughter's lives will improve if they can obtain their GEDs faster.

Good job & good luck!!