is this a good paragraph should i change/add anything?

Question

In many religons they agree with the death penalty for a variety of reasons. The bible requires the death penalty for sex before marriage,adultury, homosexual behaviour and murder. They's laws arn't only passed out in the bible but also in the Qur'an. If these sins are commited they can recieve any of the seven punisihments such as Lethal injection, Electric Chair, Hanging, Firing squad, and stoning. Each country has it's own methods for each sin.

Answer 1

It wasn't a good paragraph. I suggest changing it to this:

People of many religions agree with the death penalty for a variety of reasons. The Bible requires the death penalty for sex before marriage, adultery, homosexual behaviour, and murder. These laws are described not only in the Bible, but also in the Koran. If these sins are committed, the perpetrator can receive any of seven punishments which include death by injection, electric chair, hanging, firing squad, and stoning. Each country has its own execution method for each sin.

Answer 2

I did some correction, punctuation and spelling. But I didn't end this paragraph.


In many religions they agree with the death penalty for a variety of reasons. The bible requires the death penalty for sex before marriage, adultery, homosexual behavior and murder. These laws aren’t only passed out in the bible but also in the Qur'an.
Qur'an (also Quran) >noun Arabic spelling of Koran

If these sins are committed, they can receive any of the seven punishments such as Lethal injection, Electric Chair, Hanging, Firing squad, and stoning. Each country has its own methods for each sin.

Answer 3

You should use the spell checker, first. Then capitalize the books that are mentioned: Bible.

/They's/ laws. They's is not a word. You mean /these/

How can a law 'pass out?' People pass out from too much beer. You mean /written/



Last sentence: 'Each country has it's own methods for each sin." Now, it sounds as though in Liberia the method for a sin is different from the method of sinning in Turkey. You do not mean that. The sentence must be re-written to make is say what you mean. I leave that to you. Also, the /its/ there has no apostrophe.

And so on. Good beginning.

Answer 4

You may want to add a sentence at the end that says something like Overall the death penalty is accepted because...and go on to list reasons basically sum things up. Sounds good though, nice job.

Answer 5

1)do not use contractions in formal writing.
2)"commited" is spelled with 2 ts commiTTed.
3)"punisihments" is actually spelled "punishments"
If this is being typed on a computer, you should definitley use spell check.