my thesis statement? any suggestions on how to make it better?

Question

Scientists have a made it a proven fact that the earth is warming. This warming is called global warming; it is a temperate rise of average temperatures near the atmosphere and oceans. Global warming is the cause to many natural disasters in the world. Many people would disagree about the fact that the earth is quickly warming, but it is a proven fact and cannot be avoided.



my topic is global warming.

Answer 1

i can try to improve it just by re-forming it

Even though one may not be able to physically account for the presence of an increase in temperature,the fact that our planet subject Global Warming has been proven by Scientists all over the world. (i dont know if thats true or not. look it up) This rise in temperature, commonly known as global warming, is the cause and effect of average temperatures rising near the atmosphere and oceans. Not only is global warming an increase of temperature, it has the potential to cause many natural disasters in the world. In spite of the many people who would disagree in that the earth is warming at intense speeds, it is not a topic to be avoided when the costs of damage could not only take our enviroment, but our lives.

im sorta proud of that^ (hope it helps)

Answer 2

Try more active tense. Here is a website:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_active.html