i want to write a book, a compilation...?

Question

compilation of alot of things i thought about in my life..
a passage from a fictional story i made:..i saw what i saw only,there was no sky,spaces between leaves filled with colors not for the human eye.but my eye focused on the stream,and i was as it was.i gaze endlessly into the water, as phosphorescent as the flowers juxtaposing it with a glowing orange color..the harmonious melody that had been with me all this time transformed into the beautiful voice of a girl.not so much a girl as an angel. i can sense her presence behind be,i dare not look upon such a beautiful,beautiful creature.she bid me turn,and i did only to fall on my face in her glory.she knealt beside me with the softness of starlight and the grace of a butterfly,touching my shoulder.*and she spoke,once,andforever*"riseforyouandiareone,andall,Imortally,allisyours." I knew this and wept.i can berely recallthe song,but the truth remains in me
so what do you think,any good(forthatpart) should i continue in my endeavor

these passages were bits and pieces of a 3 page story, i tried to fit it in so it sounded good for the space i was alotted, based on fact and fiction

Answer 1

Actually, I think it is quite nice, very lovely imagery you give there...very literaturic (if such word exist)...about the content, I have no clue what you just wrote, but it seems interesting enough for me to continue reading...If you publish it, let me know...

Answer 2

I have to agree with Bardsandsages; the presentation above would probably fail and English exam. Spelling, punctuation and grammar are very poor.
It would be unkind and misleading to say that this piece could be acceptable to a literary agent. In the highly competitive world of publishing only the very best manuscripts are accepted.
If you type the above into Word you will see how many errors there are in it.
The best advice I can give you is to work slowly; imagine you are sitting with someone, telling them the scene that is in your head. This piece is hurried, and garbled. You have to remember that only you can see your vision. If you want others to understand you have to write clearly; mainstream fiction is something that people read for entertainment, and they don't like to be sent scurrying to their dictionaries; big words are not essential for mainstream fiction.
Take a deep breath... and start again.
Best of luck.

Answer 3

Whether or not you should continue depends entirely on your goals. If you just want to write a diary or journal for yourself, many people do that and it is a good writign excerise. If you expect this to get published, however, you need to develop some basic understanding of grammar, spelling, and punctuation before you waste a publisher's time. You got a lot of $5 words in there, but they mean absolutely nothing because of your horrendous presentation.

Answer 4

I guess that depends on who your target readers are.
No offense, but I was bored within the first 3 sentences.
I think it does have some potential but it does need some work. If you want someone who is going to buy into what you are trying to say, try using words that the average reader won't have to stop reading to look up the meaning in the dictionary.
I don't think that there are too many really intellectual people who are going to buy into the angel thing.
But that is just my opinion. Never stop dreaming your dreams.

Answer 5

If you want some software to help you get your thoughts in order for a book, go to this website and click on Ywriter. It's a very helpful and free program to download and will help you get organized.

Write, write, write!! And have fun!
:D

Answer 6

sounds lame