You capture my heart
When I just hear you laugh
And though we are young
You're my missing half
When you're playing with children
And showing them love
You make my heart beat
Like your sent from above
You capture my heart
With your captivating beauty
And inspire me to make
Caring for you my duty
When you're walking, you move
With such style and grace
And I could study all day
Every line of your face
I'll search high and low
Until each other we find
But now for today
You exist in my mind
When we are apart
It's you I will miss
And long once again
To taste your sweet kiss
I'll embrace you so close
Each night and each day
But for now I will search
Till I find you .................Someday
I would like to chat on yahoo IM with any girl who likes my poem (or add me to your buddy list)
2007-03-13 03:37:10 · 10 answers · asked by dwsum41@yahoo.com 2 in Sports ➔ Basketball
I really like your poem! It is really sweet! You're a pretty good poet. I am not very good at writing poetry but I can write a really good narrative. So you should keep writing poetry because it is really good! Keep up the good poetry!
2007-03-13 10:00:21 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I do like your poem, but I would change captivating beauty, maybe incredible beauty; too much capture and I would change one line And I could look all day at every line of your face. I'll search high and low, 'til each other we find, for now you only exist in my mind.
Sorry don't like to be a busy body.
PS. Your a very sensitive guy and you'll make an awesome boyfriend and./or husband and father.
2007-03-13 03:52:20 · answer #2 · answered by Mightymo 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! I really like your poem. I did notice an error, though. The line which states..."You make my heart beat
Like your sent from above" ...shouldn't that have been 'Like you're sent from above'? You apparently are a very sincere, and sensitive guy. Keep writing. You made my day!
2007-03-13 03:46:37 · answer #3 · answered by fifi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love your poem, but I got a thing for romantic-types. Its sensual and will set the mood for something special. What a wonderful man u are to sit down and harness your artistic abilities for love. Such a sexy thing to do.
2007-03-13 03:45:26 · answer #4 · answered by metalstefl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awwww i love it!!! you should name it you capture my heart. and you should put it in ur page like myspace or a blog or something and you should show it to ur teacher(if ur in school) and see if they like it then u can publish it and get a copyright!!
2007-03-13 03:46:32 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is pretty awesome. Great. Good luck
2007-03-13 04:00:34 · answer #6 · answered by old_woman_84 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the poem is so sweet! i like it!! the girl must be one heck of a girl..
2007-03-13 03:44:35 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good.
is that for someone?
maybe a little change here and there:)
2007-03-13 03:51:49 · answer #8 · answered by anonymous 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it it is so touching did you make this up yourself?
2007-03-13 03:44:39 · answer #9 · answered by #1 Nowitzki, and Duncan fan 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah...!! It's very very nice. I really like it...!!!!
2007-03-14 05:40:26 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋