I WOULD DO ANYTHING TO SEE YOUR PRETTY SMILE!
I WANT TO SEE YOUR FACE FACE AFTER MY TRAVLED MILES.
TE AMO MUCH, TE QUIERO MUCH, TE EXTRANO.
(i love u, i care for u, and i miss u)
MY TEARS HAVE FEARS OF YOUR DEATH BENETH ME.
I WISH U WERE BACK AND TELL ME YOU NEED ME.
I FEEL YOUR TOUCH, I FEEL U BESIDE ME ABUELITA.
I KNOW YOUR THEIR I KNOW YOUR HERE, YOUR ARE IN MY HEART.
ILL NEVER FORGET THOSE DAYS YOU DANCED JUST TO MAKE US
LAUGH. ILL REMEMBER THE DAYS UTHAT WE PRAYED
TO THE GOD WE LOVE, YES WE LOVE HIM!
CAUSE YOUR HEART WAS FULL OF HIM.
I WAIT TO MEET YOU AGAIN IN THE HEAVENS YOU'RE IN.
STAY BENETH ME, STAY BESIDE ME, DONT LEAVE!
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DIS POEM GOES TO MY GRANDMA' THAT DIED ON OCTOBER 2,2006
I LOVED HER SO MUCH!!... I MADE THIS POEM JUST FOR HER!
R.I.P. TERESA ALVAREZ *AKA* ABUELITA TERE
is it good??? be 100% honest plz!!
2007-03-12 17:28:03 · 5 answers · asked by MIMI LOVES WHO?? 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Your grandmother would be proud, of being loved this way by you. Keep learning about poetry! You have described your love for her very clearly. The only way you can become better is to practise and to learn english or just write poems in spanish because it is a more solid language for you. to express yourself better. Remember you do not have to rhyme, you have to use words that flow with one another. Peace and all the best in life.
2007-03-13 06:05:41 · answer #1 · answered by Lesha a Canadian. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's totally awesome,
And way too sweet,
Your grandma would love it.
And what a beat!
I'm sorry she passed
But she influenced your gift
Of writing great poems
With such ability and swift!
Now go on and write
You're so born to do this
Make your grandma smile
From her clouds of bliss
2007-03-13 00:45:21 · answer #2 · answered by geml0vely888 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its not the greatest poem certainly,
but i loved the linel ill never forget the days you danced just to make us laugh, its really honest
if you continue saying what is really on your mind and write freely you would write better poems
but this is really good considering that you remember your grandmother,.
i havent made a poem yet for my father, i still have issues about his death, i will later.i hope
2007-03-13 00:32:29 · answer #3 · answered by haringmarumo 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
The poem from your heart is beautiful . It has memories and love and feeling for what is and what was. I find it brought back memories to me for my grandmother. It touched me. MarieV
2007-03-13 02:00:34 · answer #4 · answered by marie v 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Keep up the good work.
2007-03-16 07:48:37 · answer #5 · answered by chickoo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋