Can you rate these songs wrote?

Question

I have two songs. I can write the first one in the next post, then the next in the next post, then you all can rate them.

Why can I sing?
Why acn I dance?
Why can I talk whenever there's a cance?
Why can I walk?
Why can I run?
Why can I always have fun?

(Chorus 1)
You have faced your death, just for our lives!
You have dedicated your life, all to our eyes!
You have created this beautiful land!
Now it's time for us to give you a hand!

(chorus 2)
Thankyou for feelings!
Thankyou for love!
Thnkyou for this beautiful land!
Thankyou for water,
and thankyou for food!
This is where I stand!

Why can I touch?
Why am I here?
Why acn I make this heavenly tear?
Why can I swim?
Why can I catch?
Why can I grow a pumkin patch?

(Chorus 1)
(chorus 2)
This is where I sta_____nd!
(chorus 2)
*softly* This is where I stand.........
This___is where- I stand_____.

This song talks about God making all of this for us.
When I say heavenly tear, I mean that I feel the spirit so strongly that I want to cry for being so happy.

This song talks about a girl that feels stupid and unpopular.

What am I standin' here for?
Why am I still kissin the floor,
When I could be one of them?
When I could be one of them?

(chorus)
Why can't I be a big bad snake that hisses?
Why can't I be a big fast shark that's eatin all the fishes?
Why can't I be a big firey dragon?
Why'd I have to be a big love bird a'huggin?
Whoa-ho! Why can't I___?
Because!
I'm standin herefor no reason......
I'm kissin the flor the whole season....
Whoa-----hoooooo!!!!!

(chorus)

What am I standin here for?
Why am I still kissin the floor?
When I could be one of them____?
When I could be one of them____?
When I could be- one of- them_______?

Answer 1

you need to get the tempo right for the music you choose -

Honestly -

I wouldn't say 10/10 - but with the right tune - better than a lot of the stuff on the radio

Answer 2

I would give you a full 10 out of 10.You should be a songwriter.That is brilliant!!