i need help on my poem!!!PLZZZZZ...?

Question

i have to do a poem about if i was a fish why would i be one and i have to say where it lives and stuff..im in 6th grade and im really having writers block..any thing u would add to this:
I want to be a fish,
I would live in the deep blue sea,
Of Course with my fish family,
Oh, they love me so much.

I have to be carfull not to get eaten by a whale,
Or get punctured but a lobsters tail,
There's many dangers when it comes to being a fish,
But come and try me because you know i can handle it,

The fish and I are both curious,
Our eyes wander across the Whole sea for boy fish,
But It always comes in conclusion,
There's more fish in the sea!

thats all i have for now..please dont make fun or be mean..oh and i really want this peom to be funny in a way

for all of those who are worried ill cheat, i wont i will make it my own...i just need some inspiration

Answer 1

Not to criticize but a poem needs to be lyrical or at least have some kind of rhythm.
Now I haven't written a poem in a VERY long time. See what you can make of this but DON'T use this for your project. See if you can make it better and make it your own.
Good Luck bye

Why would I want to be a fish?
A fishy me would please me
To swim and splash.
To play all day
In my Playground world under sea.
To see the underwater species swim and play.
To join them would give me joy
To be careful of the dangers I would have to be.
Sharks, lobsters I would hate to find
To be made into an appetizer I wouldn't abide.
while I ride beside the beautiful sea.
I wonder if a fishy life is right for me.

Answer 2

AWWW! Its cute. A couple of things first, where you put "there's" you should put there are, because the contraction you are using means there is, and that doesnt sound right. I think it would be cute if you added this somewhere:
When i swim, my little fins wiggle back and forth.
And all the guy fish check me out of course,
But it's fun to mess with their heads,
And they still dont get that!

Is that too promiscuous? I hope it helps you, you can change it up and all, but I think its pretty cool! Good luck on your poem.

Answer 3

This is pretty good the way you have it... If you're looking for funny try working this somewhere in there...

I met a fish with no eyes (i's). His name was fsh.

I know it's kinda lame, but I haven't been thinking about it for hours and hours.