TRANSLATION !! is my cover letter correct ??? I am French !!?

Question

Dear Sir, Madam,

I am currently a second year student in the institute of technology in Saint-Etienne, France. I work hard to have my diploma in technology and I am writing to apply for a training period in the industry.
During my studies, I had been used to handle electronics circuits, motors, automatism applications and industrial informatics languages like C++, VHDL (Verylog Hardware Description Language).
A placement in your firm offer me the possibility to develop my capacities and to be confronted with the real industrial life. I will bring you my bloom, my energy and my dynamism.
I am used to working within a team and carry out a project don’t frighten me.
This is why I wish join your company and work hand in hand in the same direction to learn thanks to your experience and attain excellence.
I hope to match your expectations.
Looking forward to your answer, thank you for your time and consideration.


Yours faithfully,

100zanfazay.

Answer 1

This is what I would translate to:
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am currently a second year student in the institute of technology in Saint-Etienne, France. I am working hard to gain my diploma in technology and I am writing to apply for a training placement in the industry.
During my studies, I have become used to handling electronic circuits, motors, automatism applications and industrial informatics languages like C++, VHDL (Verylog Hardware Description Language).
A placement in your firm would give me the possibility to develop my capabilities and to be confronted with the real industrial life situations. I will bring to your company my bloom, my energy and my dynamic attitude.
I am used to working within a team and enjoy challenges and this is why I wish join your company and work hand in hand in the same direction to learn, thanks to your experience and attained excellence.
I hope to match your expectations.
I am looking forward to hearing from you. Many thanks for your time and consideration.


Yours faithfully,

100zanfazay.

Answer 2

I am currently a second year student at the Institute of Technology at Saint-Etieene, France. I am working hard towards obtaining my degree in technology. I am writing to apply for an internship in the industry.

During my studies I have gained experience in handling electronic circuits, motors, automatism applications and industrial informatics languages like C++, VHDL (Verylog Hardware Description Language).

Placement in your firm will offer me the opportunity to develop my capabilities and first hand experience with the industry. I look forward to the opportunity to learn from some of the best in the business.

I hope to hear from you in the near future to discuss my qualifications and your expectations.

Sincerely,

XXXX

Answer 3

I think your letter needs tidying up. What about something like this? I had to make up a few things so change as needed.

Dear Sir, Madam,

I am currently in my second year at the Institute of Technology in Saint-Etienne in France. I am writing to apply for an industrial placement this summer.

I am looking to add to my work experience in the industry and a placement with your company would be a great complement to my studies. In my previous assignments, I enjoyed working as part of a team and completed all my projects to a high standard and within schedule.

I know from experience that I react well to professional and academic challenges, and would describe myself as full of personal initiative and energy. I would be happy to provide character and professional references if needed.

Practically speaking, my studies involve regular use of electronic circuits, motors and automated applications. I am also fluent in programming in C++ and VHDL (Verylog Hardware Description Language). I would be available from July 1 to September 10.

Thank you for considering my application.

Yours faithfully

Answer 4

translation cover letter correct french

Answer 5

Corrections:

I HAVE worked hard to GAIN my diploma.......
During my studies, I have HANDLED ELECTRONIC circuits.....
A placement in your firm WOULD OFFER me .........
I am used to working within a team and CARRYING OUT a project DOESN'T frighten me....
I LOOK forward to HEARING FROM YOU.....