My home is one of darkness,
a place of steel and stone
a foreign cell, a home in hell, and here I sit alone.
I pay with time for one small crime, where lights glare night, and day.
and though I rage, and pace my cage, I still must stay and pay.
But don't be sad for it's not that bad, I hid it all within.
No trace outside, it's all inside, what my trip to hell has been. Deep in the night I awake and turn on the light, for they came today and took awwy the man who lived next door. Everybody wondering who'll be next, I hope it's not my homie, you see were in here, but not just were, behind these walls of sadness. A secret I shall tell you now, but please don't tell another, in order to survive in here one must have a cover. I don't really know who to send this to for they are merly verses, most don't say anything and some are only curses.
My one desire, should I expire, is nobody cry for me.
Just hold my mother within your arms, and tell her I'm finally free.
2007-03-11 21:56:25 · 8 answers · asked by lando 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
what do you think of this one??
2007-03-11 22:01:02 · update #1
add me as a fan...I'll be posting more another day.
2007-03-11 22:49:38 · update #2
That's good. Kind of dark and gloomy, but good just the same. I love the way you end it on a sentimental note with concern for your mother.
Nicely done!
2007-03-11 22:01:55 · answer #1 · answered by Speedy 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm not sure exactly what to say ............
I am near tears! the feeling put into this.........
for lack of another word i am going to have to go with some of the other answers before me and say WOW!
2007-03-11 22:41:47 · answer #2 · answered by dreamer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats deep and so sad and full of hidden depth and oh i wanna cry now!
2007-03-11 22:02:14 · answer #3 · answered by pinkjessie 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm a published poet and I think it is very good.Jerald
2007-03-11 22:01:30 · answer #4 · answered by jerald s 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you have just been "wowed" Retard! That is absolutely worth reading!
2007-03-11 22:04:34 · answer #5 · answered by mauikittie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow... beautiful
2007-03-11 22:02:11 · answer #6 · answered by Wendy 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very beautiful. Thanks for that, I can really relate.
2007-03-11 22:00:44 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
mooore!!!! more please
2007-03-11 22:36:28 · answer #8 · answered by ♥Honesty ♥.•´ `*.¸ ♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋