I am composing a paragraph which sounds a bit awkward
This course teaches ............................ Work related knowledge and skills would also be covered.
The last sentence sounds awkward because the words in the dots already include what to learn for the job. If I write other work related knowledge, its sounds awkward too with 'other'.
I think the topics covered would involve work safety, employment rules etc.
Any suggestion ?
2007-03-11 18:59:51 · 6 answers · asked by lucky old panda 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Let me pretend the job is janitorial.
"This course teaches...... how to clean bathrooms, what chemicals to use, and how to vacuum. Work related knowledge and skills would also be covered." That makes no sense.
Since you omitted information, it's really impossible for anyone to help you improve the wording. It's obvious that the last sentence is redundant if you've already mentioned what skills will be developed in the course. Maybe use an entirely differently structured sentence in conclusion like, "This course is essential for the would-be janitor".
2007-03-11 19:33:11 · answer #1 · answered by AMEWzing 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
How long is the bit in the ellipsis? Is it short enough for this to work?
This is a ...................... course that covers both the skills and the knowledge related to the job.
This course teaches........................... . Equal emphasis is placed on the knowledge and the skills required for the job.
This is a ........................... course. Coursework will cover all aspects of work-related knowledge and skills, through topics such as work safety, employment rules and ........ practice.
I hope this helps.
2007-03-13 06:27:44 · answer #2 · answered by Fiona J 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
How about:
The course would (will) also cover work-related skills and knowledge, such as safety, employment rules....
or
Also covered in the course would (will) be / are work related skills and training such as work place safety, employment rules.....
2007-03-11 19:47:10 · answer #3 · answered by Stealthbong 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Try putting a Full Stop between the hidden words and Work.
2007-03-11 20:13:08 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nobody can give u any suggestion untill u write the full sentence, what are those dots for? are they your secret pin number and u are afraid to reveal it? what is so secret that u can't qwrite the name of that bloody course of yours?
2007-03-11 19:14:35 · answer #5 · answered by jacky 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
basic
2007-03-11 19:15:01 · answer #6 · answered by pocus_focus_2000 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋