Birthday Journey
Happy birthday today is a new adventure
Although I haven't known you many years,
Perhaps because the time was not right,
Probably it is now that you receive my gift
Yep, you guess it my heart and loyalty.
Because today is your day and it all about you
If not I hope you love this poem to make you smile,
Rejoice either ways you get to start on a new journey this year.
Twists and turns may come along but knowing you ,you'll handle it
How else will your hopes and dreams come true
During your time under the sun
Aftermost we are getting to the closing to my poem,
Yet this is not the end of our journey.
Aftermost we are getting to the closing to my poem,
Yet this is not the end of our journey.
2007-03-11 18:46:59 · 7 answers · asked by David W 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
well if it waz my birtdai i wld lyk sumone to send me that so yes it iz a gud poem for a birthdai
2007-03-11 18:51:13 · answer #1 · answered by lisa p 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad!
Needs work...
The art of good poetry is the flow of your words. Improve flow by rewriting over and over and over.
Be encouraged, and stick with it. I have a few poems @ poetry.com Poet: Joseph Graham poems: One Way Love and Son I Love You
2007-03-12 02:04:54 · answer #2 · answered by xman77 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its very good , it will be the best gift to whom u wish for the birthday
2007-03-12 01:52:52 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No doesn't sound like a poem to me, sorry!
2007-03-12 01:55:17 · answer #4 · answered by monkeymomma46 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A gift from your heart ! The best! But please enclose it in some choclates or something!
2007-03-12 01:53:10 · answer #5 · answered by lee c 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your poem is so nice and cute....i hope he or she will likes it..^_^
2007-03-12 02:04:03 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
hey it's a nice poem !!!! well done......keep it up!!!!!
best of luck!!!
2007-03-12 02:21:23 · answer #7 · answered by splendid!!!!!!!! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋