How can I rewrite this sentence?

Question

While a "a sunken morning moon" may symbolize death, Sandburg's choice of words in the last line of the first stanza connotes tranquility.

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Answer 1

While noting the tranquility of Sandburg's final lines of the stanza; the statement "a sunken morning moon" resembles the end or death.

Answer 2

Sandburg's last line of the first stanza connotes tranquility, but the line "a sunken morning moon" symbolizes death.

Answer 3

well, you could remove one of the "a"s at the beginning of the sentence, since there are two of them in a row.