This paper is due tomorrow...I have worked logn and hard but now I can't seem to say what I want and need to say in my intorduction....any help is appreciated!!...here is what i have below:
The purpose of this essay is to discuss the well known form of body modification – tattooing. I will discuss the different motives and reasons for body inscriptions, how anthropologists have studied this art, and the journey tattooing has had throughout time. I will also discuss how, and by whom this particular form of body art has most commonly been practiced through the years. I will describe a brief history including some recent discoveries, discuss how the general ideas of the tattoo has changed throughout different time periods and how the meanings behind them differ in various groups, societies, and cultures.
2007-03-11 14:56:37 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
yaa..I know I said I willdiscuss FAR TOO MANY TIMES...I just can't seem to find an easier and shorter way of saying all this.....
2007-03-11 15:13:33 · update #1
Try this:
"the reason you are reading this essay today, is to hear about TATTOOING. While you read this paper, you will be reading about different motives for body inscriptions, and the way anthropologists have gotten to know this 'art,' and the many adventures and journeys tattooing has made through time. If you wonder by whom this particular form of body art has been most commonly practiced through the years, you will find out from this essay. I will describe just a tad of the huge history of recent discoveries, and the general ideas of how the tattoo has come to change during different time periods. And how something so popular, can differ in various groups and cultures, and still stay an 'art.'"
you shouldn't explain so much of your paper in the introduction, maybe you should shorten it, and let it remain a surprise to the reader, but maybe this re-worded introduction will help though.
2007-03-11 15:08:44 · answer #1 · answered by hanalulu2☺♥☻ 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Today I will be explaining the art of tattooing, today's form of body modification. You will hear about the different reasons behind body inscriptions. I will discuss the timeline of tattooing throughout the years, and you will also hear about the studies anthropologists have conducted concerning this issue. This art was practiced many different ways and most commonly by a group of people I will discuss during this essay. A brief history including recent discoveries and how the ideas of this art have changed throughout many different time periods is also included in this paper. The meanings behind tattoos differ within society. A lot of different groups are involved in tattooing while other societies and cultures look down upon this form of expression.
Then begin with the rest of your essay.
If you are presenting this to the class here are some tips:
Make sure to use a loud, clear voice.
Make eye contact.
Don't fidget.
Be prepared for questions.
Don't forget to smile and have fun.
Hope this helps! Good luck and God bless!!
2007-03-11 22:48:58 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The purpose of this essay is to discuss the well known form of body modification – tattooing. Topics will include a brief history , how the general ideas of the tattoo have changed throughout time, and how the meanings behind them differ in various groups, societies, and cultures. The methods of those who practiced this unique form of body art will also be explored, as well as the varying motives for body inscriptions and how anthropologists have studied this art. Ink may fade from tattoos, but the fascination with them is still quite vibrant.
okay maybe the last line was gay, but..... the sentences seemed out of order to me, and although I don't think it was overly wordy, a professor might think it is...
good luck.
2007-03-11 22:31:14 · answer #3 · answered by snapper 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a little difficult to re-word your introduction. Firstly, I don't want to reword it too much because I don't know the specific assignment. What has the teacher asked you do to?
Overall, however, I can see that your introduction is more passive rather than active. This generally is not a good thing. You use "I will discuss" a great number of times. I think rather than saying you will discuss you could just say it. For example its much better to say, "Body modification-tattooing is a well known art form in today's society," rather than "The purpose of this eassy is..." I hope this helps, and you can email me if you want and I can give you some more advice.
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2007-03-11 22:09:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
don't introduce it as "discuss the well known form of body modification", introduce it as "discuss the unorthodox form of art, known as "Tattooing". because after all it is an art form. why are you going to discuss how anthropologists have studied it, are you doing a paper on anthropologists?and btw, "the general ideas of the tattoo has changed" should be "the general ideas of the tattoo {have} changed" because its "ideas" that is the subject not "tattoo". but in all its a fine introduction.
2007-03-11 22:09:47 · answer #5 · answered by jglassdude 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Tattooing is an art form which may be under appreciated and much maligned, but it has a rich anthropological history with evidence of its practice in diverse groups, societies and cultures. Body inscriptions speak to a psychology and sociology all their own as evidenced for some {# of years} now.
2007-03-11 22:22:24 · answer #6 · answered by Babs 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm too lazy to reword but YOU NEVER start an essay with the purpose of this essay is never it makes you look stupid start it with a nice opening line that grabs some attention
2007-03-11 22:05:20 · answer #7 · answered by Sean 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good to me?
2007-03-11 22:05:12 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 3⤋