Letter of recommendation?

Question

I wrote this recommendation for my friend to get a work permit. We had to do this fo 8th grade porfolio day. How can I improve it?

To Whom it May Concern,

It is my pleasure to write a letter of recommendation for Maliek Heath to receive a work permit. I have been a classmate and friend of Maliek Heath since the third grade. First and foremost, Maliek is a hard worker. Maliek is intelligent, responsible, honest, diligent in his work, and he uses his time wisely. Whenever a project is assigned, Maliek is the first to talk about how he will do his. He sees to it that his work is the best. He has always been on honor roll and in the accelerated program since I knew him. Secondly, Maliek has excellent social skills. He works well in a group or on a team, because he has a lot to offer. He has a great sense of humor, but he doesn’t let it get in the way of his work. His personality is very jocular and jovial. Finally, Maliek has good leaderships skills. He sets the example for the followers. He is an overachiever. Maliek is the one to take charge to see that things are done correctly.

Sincerly,

Answer 1

With the exception of running this through spell check ("Sincerely" is missing an "E"), you did a REALLY good job with this letter. I have seen letters from executives that were not as nicely written. Your friend should keep you around for a few years until he has to find a real job. :)

Answer 2

Great letter, it sounds as if he is young probably underage, most of my letter of recommendations had been done by proffesional people, and i know to make a great impression a more proffesional stating achievements and what he does will...look good for you and for him..i do not advise you to put classmate or any affilation of friendship...write more of accomplisments what you provide or seen..either way is not like they are going to meet up with you...they only call you. also use your email use words like goal oriented and motivated to finish his education ect.
example:
if you require further information, please free to contact me at [e-mail] otherwise please accept my recommendation of xxx xxxx as a candidate for your consideration.
you still did a great job!!