Lyrical? Test my lyrics please?

Question

I'm more unpredictable than a biassed dice,
even more spicy like whipped cream and rice
Big was the man, lyrics freeze like ice
Rappers who step to him break like obi trice

Pel from north and yosh from stokey street legends
that kept the hood from looking pokey

Rice isn't spicy? Maybe your just not eating the right rice, i'll change that to "minced meat and rice" wah u saying now?

Answer 1

I wasn't aware that whipped cream and rice is "spicy"...
I would say whipped cream and rice is mushy.

Answer 2

Try this for size u did good though

I'm more unpredictable than a biassed dice,
more spicy than Chilli pepper sauce on rice
Big was the man, lyrics cold like ice
Rappers who step to him fold like obi trice

Pel from north and yosh from stokey street legends
that kept the hood from looking pokey

Answer 3

better than So Solid
kinda Chuck D standard and style (and he was the original, so respect)
Maxi Jazz still wins though, him and Streets.

If the delivery is good you will do fine with that, but i get the impression that you're not completely talking with your own voice. That's what "keep it real" is supposed to mean.

Step beyond, broaden what you listen to and read, and make sure you only ever load your own bullets.

PS to Tilly: Easy girl! rap isn't known for pedantry

PPS yeah it depends how you cook the rice. you might need some whipped cream to stop it burning your mouth off

Answer 4

Umm... they are mostly good.
But a biassed dice will be more predictable than an unbiassed one because biassed means that it is more likely (as oppossed to an unbiassed one) to choose a certain number. For example it could be biassed towards the number 6 then it will be more likely to roll a 6 than your average dice. An unbiassed dice will be more unpredictable. I know it's picky but you asked me to read them and I it's easily fixed :-)
ps. lol! I know (my boyfriend often forces me to listen to NWA and beleive me some of their lyrics make my mind boggle, but they are quite good none the less), I just thought I'd point it out :-)

Answer 5

how is whipped cream and rice spicy? sorry but this sounds crap..if you wanna play like that..forget about the rice or minced meat..whipped cream...spicy??? what about even more spicy than hot jamaican chicken fried rice...lol

Answer 6

Yo Big Brother
Are you trying to smother
Me with tripe
That sounds like hype
To promote this crap
From a nice sounding chap
Are you really sincere?
This won't buy the beer
It may be all done'n'dusted
But it won't cut the mustard
These words make me sob
Make sure you keep your day job!

Answer 7

You just did one of the dumbest things ever... You're not suppose to put your lyrics on the computer or in public because someone can steal them. Just wanted to give you a heads up. But.. yeah it's good.

Answer 8

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Answer 9

6 out of 10 ....

Answer 10

i didn't know whipped cream and rie was spicy:S:S

to be honest ,wasn't my cup of tea , pretty rubbish actually