Grammar checking!! Can anyone please correct my short writing?

Question

I’m supposed to write a short personally essay on whether Saddam Hussein’s capital punishment was fair or not.

Yes Saddam Hussein’s judgment was fair because capital punishments are permitted in Iraq. But the way and the timing they executed Saddam was inappropriate; it was a kind of provocation for a lot of people. One point was: the execution was on a religious holiday which is not aloud in Iraq. In Iraq’s law it is forbidden to execute someone on his religious holiday. They executed him without respect to his rights to die with dignity. Another fault was done when trying to diminish Saddam before his execution. The material used for his execution was inappropriate: for Saddam’s execution they used a thick rope that broke his neck. One week later they used a thin but long rope to execute Saddam’s brother which beheaded him. During the execution none of his volunteering lawyers were admitted to supervise that the execution was done within the law.

This was all purposely done by Iraqi’s puppet government in order to raise tension between the two different groups.

Saddam was executed on behalf of the white house to suit their politic purposes. Bush promised the congress that Saddam’s case would be solved by the end of 2006, and so be it.

*I’m a grade 10 student in high school
**its 1:00am so it was kind of hard writing it!

Answer 1

Yes, I believe that Saddam Hussein’s judgment was fair since capital punishments are permitted in Iraq. However, I think that the timing, and the way in which the execution was carried out was inappropriate.

The execution provoked many people since it was carried out on a religious holiday. Iraqi law forbids executions on religious holiday. When Saddam Hussein was executed, his rights to die with dignity were not respect.

Another problem with the execution concerns the materials inappropriate materials which were used. For Saddam’s execution a thick rope was used, which broke his neck. One week later when Saddam's brother was executed, a thin but long rope was used, which beheaded him. None of Saddam's volunteering lawyers were admitted to supervise that the execution was done within the law.

Answer 2

MOST CHANGES IN CAPITALS (YOU WILL NEED TO CHANGE THE CAPS BACK TO SMALL LETTERS, WHERE APPROPRIATE):
Yes Saddam Hussein’s judgment was LEGAL because capital punishment IS permitted in Iraq. But the MANNER and the timing they executed Saddam was inappropriate; it was a kind of provocation for a lot of people. One point IS THIS: the execution was on a religious holiday which is forbidden on A religious holiday. They executed him without respect FOR his right to die with dignity. Another fault OCCURRED when PEOPLE TRIED TO DENIGRATE Saddam before his execution. ALSO, The material used for his execution was inappropriate. They used a thick rope that broke his neck. One week later they used a thin but long rope to execute Saddam’s brother, which beheaded him. FINALLY, During the execution none of SADDAM'S volunteering lawyers were admitted SO THAT THEY COULD supervise AND SEE THAT the execution was done within the law.

ThE EXECUTION WAS purposely ACCOMPLISHED by Iraqi’s puppet government in order to HEIGHTEN tension between the two different groups.

Saddam was executed on behalf of the white house to suit their politicAL purposes. Bush promised the congress that Saddam’s case would be solved by the end of 2006, and so be it.

Answer 3

Yes, (notice the comma I added) Saddam Hussein’s judgment was fair because capital punishments are permitted in Iraq. But(cross out the "but" and add "however," the way and the timing they executed Saddam was inappropriate; it was a kind of provocation for a lot of people. One point was: the execution was on a religious holiday which is not aloud in Iraq. In Iraq’s (instead of "Iraq's" put "Iraqi" for that is the correct term)law it is forbidden to execute someone on his ("his"? no I would put "a")religious holiday. They executed him without respect to his rights to die with dignity. Another fault was done when trying to diminish Saddam before his execution. The material used for his execution was inappropriate:(no need for a colon, you used that already. Just start a new sentence. start is with "For example") for Saddam’s execution they used a thick rope that broke his neck. One week later they used a thin but long rope to execute Saddam’s brother which beheaded him. During the execution none of his volunteering lawyers were admitted to supervise that the execution was done within the law.

Answer 4

Yes, Saddam Hussein’s judgment was fair because capital punishments are permitted in Iraq. But the way and the timing of Saddam's execution was inappropriate; it was a kind of provocation for a lot of people. One point was that the execution was on a religious holiday which is not allowed in Iraq. In Iraq’s law it is forbidden to execute someone on his religious holiday. They executed him without respect to his right to die with dignity. Another fault was that they tried diminish Saddam before his execution. The material used for his execution was inappropriate: for Saddam’s execution they used a thick rope that broke his neck. One week later they used a thin but long rope to execute Saddam’s brother which beheaded him. During the execution none of his volunteer lawyers were admitted to assure that the execution was done within the law.

This was all purposely done by Iraqi’s puppet government in order to raise tension between the two different groups.

Saddam was executed on behalf of the White House to suit their political purposes. Bush promised the Congress that Saddam’s case would be solved by the end of 2006, and so it was.

Answer 5

Saddam Hussein’s sentence was fair, in part, because capital punishment is permitted in Iraq. The way and the timing they executed Saddam was inappropriate as it was a provocation for many people. Execution on a religious holiday is not proper in Iraq as religious law prohibits it for any reason. Because of this law, many believe that he was executed without the respect due to him. The slanderous remarks, insults and mockery furthered this belief in the eyes of many. None of Saddam Hussein’s legal counsel was present at his execution to oversee the process. The rope used to hang Saddam was of a different size that the rope used in the execution of his brother. The thicker rope used for Saddam merely broke his neck while the rope used on his brother decapitated him. ( I don’t know why this would matter)

There is my quick changes, I’m sure other’s will do better. You kind of jump around and don't make very coherent points.

Answer 6

1st line "is" permitted. 2nd line omit the first word ..But. Start with "The.."
. Next... " it was an act that provoked a lot of people..."
Next "which is not allowed in Iraq..."
Next" When trying to diminish Saddam before he was executed"
The material used to execute him was inappropriate, in my opinion, as they used a flat rope that broke his neck.
Last :
During the execution, none of his Volunteer lawyers were admitted to see that the sentence of execution, was carried out within the law.
Hope this helps late for me too!

Answer 7

Hey… about me? Well most of you already know me pretty well, but for those few who don’t here it goes: My name is XXXX, Im very open minded and im down for almost anything. I have been through a lot of things during the last year that made me realize how important life is, and that I have to enjoy every minute of it. I hate selfish poeple who only think about themselves without caring about others feelings. I also don’t understand gold diggers . Guys there are a lot of important things in life besides money…money doesn’t buy happiness or love or friendship (personal experience ). I have an immense love for children, there is nothing that can make me happier than see a child’s smile… I have a 4 y/o daughter that I love to death, I would do anything for her, she is the greatest gift God has given to me. I also like to volunteer, because helping others brings me a lot of inner satisfaction… Im not going to say that im nice or friendly.. get to know me and judge for yourself cause I am who I am, and Im not changing anytime soon. It is a very well written paragraph very good for English being a second langauge I did some minor changes in it, although they are little things it helps to make people think a little higher of you. in writing do not use text expressions such as ppl for people and lol they arent needed

Answer 8

point across !!! should be fine!!!