& all she wanted to do was capture that perfect image of her- the one that truly reflected that soul within her as well as the one that truly reflected the image within the mirror. she didn't know herself- she was a perfect stranger to her own heart and mind. she was strong yet weak and silly yet deep. she was optimistic yet pesimistic and she was happy yet sad. she was this conflicting image that reflected nothing but something sketchy. she didn't know what to do with the pieces that didn't fit in- in fact, she had no piece fitting in with another. & in spite on this, all she wanted to do was to capture that perfect image of her- the one that would stick with her forever because she would know that she knew herself more than ever.
& it's funny how within one second, we can decide to take something huge- something we planned for days or months or even years to accomplish- and decide to just throw it away..deciding that it's not what we wanted- not what we wanted to pursue.
2007-03-10 13:46:02 · 10 answers · asked by Lina 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I LOVE IT......You are a wonderful writer and I thank you for sharing that.(obviously its difficult to please a crowd who struggles so with vocabulary,grammar and just the alphabet in general)that being able to retain anything deeper then "see spot run" is a real challenge!!So anyone who says its to long,well they can't read very well and are struggling so with their own insecurities of being grammatically challenged.Something you know nothing about.
2007-03-11 17:05:32 · answer #1 · answered by FYIIM1KO 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What kind or writer do you want to be? Someone who just entertains, or someone who creates art? If you want to just entertain (which I admit is an art in itself) then you're doing fine. But if you want more than that, you need to enroll your reader in this persons life by illustrating what you want them to see. Stop telling the reader what this woman is like. Instead, show them! Let the reader see her interact and be both "optimistic yet pessimistic."
It's the difference between telling someone "that joke made me laugh" and actually telling the joke and making them laugh.
2007-03-10 21:52:40 · answer #2 · answered by sunnskye 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very insightful with a lot of meaning behind the words from someone so young, keep writing.. :)
2007-03-10 21:57:11 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You go girl, I thinks it's terrific--and would certainly read a book that you wrote. Your metaphors are great and such a way of comparisons --5 stars for you lol
2007-03-10 21:51:38 · answer #4 · answered by luminous 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
honestly? and I am not trying to be mean...too many words to say too little.
Mark Twain said good writers get their point across with as little words as possible.
Positives? it seems to be very creative.
2007-03-10 21:51:12 · answer #5 · answered by John P 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Less hyphens, it's distracting, I think but other than that I like it!
I can't write to save my life
*jealous*
2007-03-11 21:15:16 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
your writing isn't bad....the only things I can see is,,,keep your sentences shorter....keep up the good work...
2007-03-10 21:57:23 · answer #7 · answered by Raphael D 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
good. and very detailed
2007-03-10 21:52:03 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok
2007-03-10 21:49:43 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
ITS COOL...
2007-03-10 21:52:41 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋